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EvilBlueCrystal
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The writing is good but hard to understand in some places, the protagonist abilities are boring and his character is flat, the side character are never interesting the dialog is not that engaging, the world is decent but hard to imagine how the place looks, the story and pacing is fine but doesn't have something to progress towards. The start was good but a bit hard to follow all the characters. After that the reincarnation was unnecessary dumb and unrealistic, instead he could reincarnate with fragmented memories of his past life, then explain his current situation, location, abilities. The protagonist is not that interesting even the person that that fell on the sea seems better. It lacks basic information before the Blueno character arrives, about the rank of strength and types of powers of the pirates/admirals, what fruit ability does he have or how did he become strong without one, why is money important, how do the fruits work, how does the protagonist's power compare to others, current time, word topography. The protagonist is somewhat boring and flat, it doesn't feel like he's a reincarnator at all, he's not that interesting or unique having qualities or traits, does he been have a goal, and him having no additional talent based of his previous life after reincarnation is boring and feels like he's not op or has something to progress towards, something like merging and evolving the fruits, and the the fights are hard to follow. Also it's unrealistic for someone to suddenly show up and want to join him without a logical m reason, just because hes strong when the information he has is that he was planning to kill him. He's supposed to be a leader or intelligent but doesn't show any of that and try to convince him, and there's not any introduction about the new member either so he's irrelevant.

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Hello, thank you for your criticism, it was very helpful and I'll take note of what you've said and work on it. A few things in this list have been done on purpose due to the past of the actual character or the protagonist. 1. The character is flat and boring because the memories of his entire childhood and formative years were wiped away, he is sort of a blank slate, which makes things like conversations and dialogue hard for him. His memory is not perfect either, so he can't remember everything about the pre-time skip, and none of it would be helpful as he is living during the time skip. 2. As I said he is a blank slate, and his goals and ambitions will have to be fleshed out in the future, and I'll be taking care of that quite soon. 3. The character will be strong in the future, but never OP. He won't be someone who steamrolls through everyone and everything. 4. I don't want to info-dump, and most of these things are already known to the reader through implication, like his strength being a bit over the Vice-Admiral level. 5. You're right about Holman, I hadn't even planned him until I wrote him down, but he is more than meets the eye. You're right about everything else though, it would help a lot if I wrote more descriptively. Thanks for your criticism, I hope you keep reading!