Just a suggestion for the author. I’ve noticed your use of present tense in most, if not, all of you chapters. I believe past tense would sound better. Like “he slept like a long after he went back home”

Neville:

Are these paragraphs paraphrased by ChatGPT? There are unnecessary descriptions using words like testament or conviction. ChatGPT loves to use these types of words.

So he fears death?

I asked too early

What is this �

The suspense

Dropped, can’t tolerate this grammar.

This is truly one of the best HP fanfics I’ve ever read. And to all the people who called the MC pathetic and weak for having empathy, go F yourselves. This is what we call character development.

Didn’t he already have it?

Milim Eye is an intrinsic skill

So kidnapping?

I thought Tonks was Bryan’s love interest.

Are you sure this is a continuation of “The Spider” by i’mjusttryingtofindmyway in ffn. I compared the first few chapters with the chapter from the original. It’s just the author splitting part a long-ass chapter into tiny segments and posting it here.

ChatGPT

Is it just me or the chapters are now written like chatGPT? Words like resolve, determination, and urgency are used often by chatGPT. Not that I’m against it.