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MenacingLeaf11mthReplied to evilmunky45- MenacingLeaf1yrReplied to Shadow_BLAck_1018
- MenacingLeaf1yrPosted
I hope the author sees this. The improvement and the format improves dramatically over the chapters which I was really happy about, and the details are plenty! I loved the development of the protagonist! I noticed we get to enoy 2 main characters which is awesome! I see it hasn't been updated but I got addicted. To the author, evilmunky45, may you please comeback! Your writing style is fantastic and has much potential. I don't want to give you anything less of a perfect score. This world you are making is too cool. I felt compelled to write this hoping you read it. Please come back and write so that my stability of updates score on this book can be true!! I need more! \(T~T)/ I will reread this again if you update it!
- MenacingLeaf1yrCommented
Wow! Okay so your writing has improved dramatically since the first chapter or even the prologue. Like the format is really good, so much improvement on this chapter. And the grammar has been good! It is very descriptive. It's a lot of reading, but I like that a lot, I can really see it all happening in my imagination. There's a few mistakes sprinkled here and there but you write a lot so am guessing it is bound to happen. Ta'ro seems to have found conviction! This hasn't been updated in so long though. Author will you be writing more?
Ch 4 Ta'ro - Whisper in the Wind - MenacingLeaf1yrCommented
Great description but like other reader states, this are some big paragraphs. Maybe smaller ones will make it easier to read?
Having contemplated it for some time he had made up his mind that it was now or never. He has his grimoire now, this meant it wasn't only feasible, but also no longer a fool's errand. A sacrifice sure, but it meant he could grow and develop into what was needed in Sprigladel, not just his community. These troubles were not just things that troubled where he calls home, but the entire land had their fair share of troubles, and everyone needed help one way or another. Sil decided to do just that. He wouldn't be the first, but he was hoping to be the last to ever do something so drastic. Sil started spending time drawing, writing, contemplating his plan of actions. Sil grabbed a short sword to pack along with other things. The sword was forged by his Uncle Asher, the local blacksmith who was skillful in his work, but hardly had much of it these days. The sword was strong, sharp, and had an intricate design along the blade, and fit the sheathe his father made for him like a glove. He then grabbed his leather hunting gear, before talking with his mother, Koa. It didn't take her long to realize what discussion was about to partake. She wasn't clairvoyant but her intuition told her he wanted to leave Talreath and journey to help the people cared about. She knew if she did not give him her approval or support it would leave her with more guilt and distress, not if but when he leaves. Koa stayed silent for much of Sil's speech. It was more of a monologue than a discussion. - MenacingLeaf1yrCommented
So like compared to other stuff this has lots of detail and based on the grammar I am guessing a native English speaker. I still enjoy other stuff but this seems like a much easier read compared to others. And I like the setup you have going on so far, assuming that's what the prolouge is [img=recommend]
Ch -1 Prologue: Sprigladel’s Fall and Rise