read two chapters, the 'psyc hotic' monologues just ain't it. honestly the only thing that made me read this thing is the weird synopsis. born as aegon the unworthy's twin but also the son of viserys and alicent? i think the author's confused aegon ii with aegon iv, like... you're writing a fanfic about hotd and didn't even know that? maybe it's just AU where somehow the two combined and became a mega a hole but honestly i don't care, it's just the d emented self insert of a dude anyway

honestly had my hopes up due to chapter count but that god pokemon thing really turns me off. noticed the author deleted reviews as well, as well as going on an insult review spree to other authors on his comment history lol, so he's become one of those authors who can't take it anymore and just loses it, and i don't doubt he's going to delete this review too.i know you're seeing this. and to which i say, pathetic.

reuploaded 3rd time. This is great, I will just assume that you know your stuff since you're a bio major, but to be honest, I'm afraid on where this is going. I understand that a lot, and I mean A LOT of webnovel users simply don't want the MC to have difficulties or just straight up mary sued every problems they have. I'm starting to feel that your story is becoming 'larger than life' with the mention and addition of certain characters, which is not enjoyable as a story of this caliber. This is your story, so it's your choice, but i personally think that you should write a more personal story, give Peter a more focused role, don't add characters too much, and Gwen, she is spiderwoman after all, later the 'canon event' will come, and maybe just the both of them will deal with spider society and tried to stop it from happening, and while that is still a 'larger than life' plot, the core is still both of them trying to not make their loved ones killed. to me, one of the weakness of this fanfic is Peter himself, he's cold and boring sometimes, too hungry for power, which I know a lot of people like that kind of stuff, but it doesn't make for an interesting story in my eyes. seriously, wth is wrong with this site, can't even upload reviews

you know, seeing your review i realize how low the standard of a fanfic here

dude mentioned nothing about him hating the story because of harem, praised your story, gave opinions that the story isn't for everyone because of some things and still you pulled the "LOL. NoHaReM LoVeR, I gUeSs", getting defensive for literally no reason. what a sensitive author.

you changed the name of the novel and only told the original name and the author when asked so that the views would register first, before that you just said "just search it up on fanfic.com" and left it at that. that looks quite scummy to me.

i think you should get out of your mother's basement buddy