Review Detail of Daoistg4vF8f in Marvel : A Reptilian Adventure

reuploaded 3rd time. This is great, I will just assume that you know your stuff since you're a bio major, but to be honest, I'm afraid on where this is going. I understand that a lot, and I mean A LOT of webnovel users simply don't want the MC to have difficulties or just straight up mary sued every problems they have. I'm starting to feel that your story is becoming 'larger than life' with the mention and addition of certain characters, which is not enjoyable as a story of this caliber. This is your story, so it's your choice, but i personally think that you should write a more personal story, give Peter a more focused role, don't add characters too much, and Gwen, she is spiderwoman after all, later the 'canon event' will come, and maybe just the both of them will deal with spider society and tried to stop it from happening, and while that is still a 'larger than life' plot, the core is still both of them trying to not make their loved ones killed. to me, one of the weakness of this fanfic is Peter himself, he's cold and boring sometimes, too hungry for power, which I know a lot of people like that kind of stuff, but it doesn't make for an interesting story in my eyes. seriously, wth is wrong with this site, can't even upload reviews