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Drao_788dCommentedCh 27 Chapter 27 : Little Sister's Little Hole P.1 (18+)- Drao_789dCommentedCh 26 Chapter 26 : First Partner (18+)
- Drao_7821dCommentedCh 25 Chapter 25 : Gina's Genius Idea (18+)
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"Two please. And a soda." Phil said and waited for the vendor to make his hot dog. In the 2 minutes he was waiting there, a small figure appeared behind him and stole the bike without him noticing it. - Drao_783mthCommentedCh 12 CH: 12 Blood Debt and Shock
- Drao_784mthReplied to EpictramCh 39 Chapter 39
- Drao_784mthCommentedCh 7 07 The Corruption Of Shizuku Hatsufuji pt.3 R18
- Drao_786mthReplied to Arthur_ErosGodCh 242 Why?
- Drao_786mthCommentedCh 12 Makeout with Kurogawa*
- Drao_786mthCommentedCh 10 Hinata's confidence
- Drao_787mthReplied to jess_weston
I agree with you, but since this is an NTR world there has to be moaning and more, it is always like that but I agree it is annoying to read a lot of baseless moaning, the dialogue and actions that cause those moaning are important. , although I am not a fan of being called 'dad'. Well, everyone has their tastes.
Ch 6 Fun time with Hinata.Rewrite (R18) - Drao_787mthCommented
It has improved a lot, there are no unnecessary exaggerated moans, the dialogue was very good and if you can improve it it will be great but take your time, there is no rush. This is my suggestion if you want to take it or discard it, your decision, but don't put several mcf at the beginning, develop each one in its time and maybe you can do a vote on the next mcf that will appear. Like I said, it's just my suggestion, maybe you already have other plans for the story. Thanks for chapter 8/10.
Ch 6 Fun time with Hinata.Rewrite (R18) - Drao_787mthCommented
The situation is strong, at least give the system a map of where the zombies and survivors come from, so it can be better prepared.
What Jonathan and the others didn't know, its that the car they had parked 3 KM away was surrounded by another horde of zombies. This means the zombies most likely would've taken them by surprise and were smart enough to make 2 separate traps to kill humans. - Drao_787mthCommentedCh 6 Fun time with Hinata.Rewrite (R18)