Not that I expect to change anything, or that it really hurts--but accuracy with a pistol almost absolutely necessitates accuracy with a rifle and well.. a shotgun. Controlled breathing/timing heartbeats, being able to line up your sights, and a smooth trigger squeeze are all FAR more difficult on a pistol, and the skills translate to a rifle which is basically the same thing with a more accurate gun and clearer sights. A guy who is an ace with a pistol is never going to be LAST in a group with a rifle.

This character isn't autistic and has talked about how his brother has an issue similar to what Sheldon deals with. Therefor he is Ben Affleck's character's brother, who is played by... Jon Bernthal. Like I said.

"Bro" you're stupid. Neither of those things were true. In fact, libraries were more popular in the 60s than they are today. Less big public bookstores, way more "hanging out at the library."

Yep. So, it's a young Jon Bernthal.

Typical Webnovel "meh." The writing quality is fine in terms of coherency, but lacking in terms of an understanding of pacing or building a satisfying story. The novel appears to have regular updates. The story development as far as I got (not far) is rapid and not really satisfying, for example: the character starts out homeless and that homelessness is essentially resolved with zero effort. The character is under the thumb of a local gang, that's resolved with zero effort. The character is poor, that's resolved with zero effort. Essentially, the author could have started out the MC as a wealthy martial arts student in York New or some other random place, and you'd at least say, 'Lucky guy' instead of 'how the hell did he take those guys out'? Character design: The design of the MC suffers from the same thing as the story, they're unsatisfyingly good at what they do for no reason. The character is suffering from weakness caused by malnutrition, but apparently is strong enough to take out a gang armed with weapons--without getting hurt. They're written for the lowest common denominator of Webnovel readers who appreciate edgelord characters that are "totally badass." World background: didn't get far enough to really appreciate if the author fully fleshes out a satisfying HxH story, but they didn't strike me as failing to understand the world, so, I expect that they'll handle the setting fine.

First, just use control of time to revert the damage, but yeah, good plans.

Being a slave means being told what to do without pay. He was a captive or prisoner.

Apparently being an aimless block of wood in his past life made him an expert at storytelling.

Ariel has friends?

Let's just start off by saying, all critiques below, aside... I enjoyed this, and look forward to more. It's a fun idea for a combination, author, and I hope you continue it. So, that said.. Biggest critique: the author doesn't strike me as as being SUPER thorough with character details or to seem to know the material of either the Addams Family or Harry Potter extremely well. Character detail issue: as an example that pops up a few times in different ways, in the early chapters the character talks about muggle studies and it's clear that they're pureblood and don't know muggle society. ... But within a chapter ends up quoting a famous American Muggle author from memory, which is just layers of odd choices for a pureblood wizard. Not only is he reading muggle authors, he reads them enough to be able to quote _poignantly_ on topic, all while going to Wizard school in Scotland and having a full academic schedule as he, I assume, prepares for his Newts or Owls, or whatever year he's supposed to be. Second issue (as an example of not knowing the settings): Grandmama (the Grandma in the stories,) is literally called a 'witch' or fortune teller; has a big warty nose, brews from a pot, spouts curses and hexes at people, uses voodoo, etc. It's not a thing that shows up in Wednesday (IIRC) YET, but I wouldn't be surprised--AT ALL--if magic of some variety shows up a bit more in the next season. It's not at the level of HP, so MC would have a huge leg up still, but acting like he's some unique unicorn is just weird. Lastly.. he's a Slytherin (cunning, ambitious), and not stupid, yet he apparently can't keep from spilling the beans about his coming from another world through more that ONE conversation with Weems, or ONE day of knowing Wednesday. Like, I don't care that he spilled, but he apparently does, and just can't keep a secret to save his life?

Need to add Professor Pyg

Male V. Interesting.

Bakker.

Either he gets more points for Marvel universe, this gang is INCREDIBLY sinful, or the author is scaling point rewards in a silly fashion. He spent almost a year in HP world, took out the Death Eaters, Voldemort (who was a country-level problem) and helped the hero on his quest and didn't even get double this in points.

The big issues: 1. the author/MC picked a world that they (in the story and by writing out of the story as well) find apparently boring. Seriously, if you don't like a setting enough to want to explore its intricacies then why are you picking it to begin with? Great fan fiction explores a setting and tries to expand on the pre-existing canon in small and unique ways. 2. She has yet to do simple shit like throw an Undetectable Expansion Charm on her room or really do anything "magical" except some combat magic she throws out to flex. And flex she does, like she's a genius and not someone who was given everything by her system. (Which is typical of people who get a system in fiction, but it doesn't make it less eyeroll worthy.) 3. Zero dramatic tension. 4. Honestly, it feels like the author/MC only went to Legacies so that they could shit on characters they don't like and hook up with their waifu of choice.