Really liked your imagination and the world you created. The quality of your writing is not bad but its not good either. There is room for improvement there. But otherwise, its an enjoyable read. Keep writing mate

Thanks Deb!

thanks mate. I have 11 chapters out now. hope to get better at telling the story with time

I like story line,but you may need to edit a bit.

Looking good,room for improvement though. Keep at it.