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man i don't even know where to start. you ruined a potential good fic by thinking with your di*k instead of your brain. This was supposed to be a sign-in system story and in 32 chapters i haven't seen much about it. there's barely any mention of it and all there is sex in your mind nothing else. this story has potential to be something great but you have nothing going on besides hogging all girls and sex.
you are lagging in three departments: Story development, character design and the background of the of the world you are trying to portray. you have good ideas running in there but the lack of engagement of characters is making it dull. So far its like you got good ideas but you lack words to convey the feeling. good luck...
oh com on ... try to narrate the the story a bit more bro.. you could've written a battle between students or a introductory battel between MC and some other professor or a senior student. And it is getting too centered to MC. You have not even scratched the surface of the potential your fic has. Its running too fast and there barely anything in the chapters to cling on.. and chapters are getting short. so the excitement of the chapter is getting lost somewhere.
At this point its becoming boring.. there could've been more interactions in this chapter.. you talked about pranks and MC only have been on the receiving end of the pranks.. you could've made it more engaging by making MC do pranks on students and maybe some punishments just for the fun of it.. A good story is a story in which you could visualize yourself living through the story and so far it's getting less engaging by the next chapter....
Try to make conversations with characters and interaction with other staff. Otherwise its getting boring, it's just a prospective story from your point of view and its getting hard to engage with the story. And lastly, don't take pressure write your own story but with bit more engaging with other characters. I'm enjoying it for now.. Keep it up author..