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An indeed enticing work of art, I was captivated by the synopsis and the smooth flow of the novel, in all honesty I find it hard to point out any mistakes.Keep up the good work Author!!
"but to no avail." there should be a full stop immediately after this sentence
something more like. *I picked up my headphones, I made sure to get one decorated in pink* I'm not really sure besides it's your novel
when using 1st person POV I it's not advisable to describe as such *my headphone is* it sounded off for a 1st person POV
the *break into a smile* doesn't really sound fitting for the sentence, try looking for sth better
honestly I was indeed captivated by the first few sentences, for some reason unknown to me I just felt like 'Yes' this is the right novel.I've been reading for a while now and I can only say this; KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK AUTHOR !!!
I get what you're saying, but that is indeed how the novel is meant to be at the start, however I'll consider your thought. Thanks a lot
hey thanks for the kind comment, however am a bit lost by your words. Can you explain what you mean
yeah it's not like dis is a harem[img=Why]
well yeah he ends up with a girl
sorry 😐 my mistake, I meant if you're reading and seem to notice a mistake let me know. Arigato