I think I get what you meant now. But the word "things" here is used in a more abstract and general sense. It doesn't carry the same derogatory or dehumanizing connotation as when referring to individuals directly as "things." It's a way to categorize friends and family as important aspects or elements of life. So I don't think I'll be editing this. Sorry if you still feel offended.

I don't really get what's offensive about calling living beings as 'thing'. But all right, since it's supposedly offensive, what word do you suggest I change it with?

How so? Please elaborate.

Would love to, but I have an exam at the end of this month. Unfortunately. [img=Speechless]

Is it too fast-paced?

Well, I'm kind of tired of reading mcs acting like 'gentleman' and having almost no personality, which I've been reading a lot lately.

Maybe

Hello, this is my first time writing a novel, so if there is anything I can improve or fix, please tell me. And if there are any questions, please ask.

I've been dragging my feet from chapter 150 to read til now, I hope my review will help you improve your writing, Author.

And the mc is spineless, he goes on and on about how he wants to make a monster harem and by extension, that should mean having lots of sex. But he acts like he has erectile dysfunction and goes to say that he is "a gentleman", going so far as to turn around when the girls are purposely changing clothes in front of him. Like most of the sex scenes only happens because either the mc, or the girl is going to die if they dont release energy(cum). And most of the girls only lose their virginities only because of the reason stated before or because they practically throw themselves naked at him, I might go as far as to say they raped him (reverse raped him?) and that's just some of them, I'm like 300 chapters in and half the girls are still virgins. I'm not asking you to write sex scenes every ten chapters but at least make the mc have a spine. He might as well pull out his spine and sell it since it'll bring more benefits to him than keeping it in his body.

It's frustrating to see how weak they are everytime they face problems and magically survive through it but not rush to get stronger after surviving them, they just go around following the flow with like no actual aim, like how mc decided to just follow the king's order to help the neighbouring country when he knows the singularity is coming, not doing everything he can to get stronger, and follow a rumour of time travel to save Fatima on a whim.

And there are a few plotholes here and there, like after they fought hundreds of weakend 9th stage demons near the town, did they not get the energy crystals/cores to power up? they should've gotten hundreds of them, enough to power at least one of the girls to 9th level but there wasn't any mention about any energy crystals. And isn't mc supposed to be rich as the head of two ancient clans? Can't he buy energy crystals to evolve the girls? It's like since they can fight higher than their level then they don't feel the need to rush to evolve.

I like the setting and concept, but I think the mc is plain and the harem girls are kinda shallow, almost no character development, the mc is kinda spineless. Okay read, but can be improved. I hope the author will continue improving.

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The clothes are tooskin tight but idk how to tell the AI to not make it like that