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You have to remember that Vivium was thought to be one type of aether when it was actually Life, Death, Creation, and Destruction Life= Order of Birth Death= Order of Demise Creation= Order of Creation Destruction= Order of Destruction As for fate/destiny, Equis is a thing. So yeah, there's that.
3.) Kanon backstory are spoilers 4.) Shin backstory are spoilers 5.) Militia created Epheotus without much direct confrontation, meaning very little draconids even know of the existence of Gods. 6.) That would mean the Asuras would learn about aether on their own without the help of gods
1.) The villain, as they are now incorporated into the maou gakuin verse, will obviously be receiving buffs. Like how Arthur got source magic, Agrona and Kezess will also get some buffs. 2.) That's what I said, draconids, even the ones not part of the Selection Trial, borrow power from gods.
I realized this pretty early on, even in my first fanfic, but it would be pretty boring if it was just Anos in TBATE and nothing else. Anos could literally steamroll the entire series and have all problems end in just 1 arc. Making TBATE a part of the Militia world would make the fic a lot more interesting than Anos dogstomping all of tbate. It makes you wonder, what the hell actually happened during the years Anos was dead. I also have a lot of fun trying to connect concepts from the two series together.
The 8,000 years part is valid, I may have to change the date a bit. As for aether, it lines pretty well when you consider aevum is the Order of Time, spatium could be the Order of Space (since there is no such thing in Maou Gakuin), and Vivium the Order of Creation and the Order of Destruction. And since Asuras consider themselves gods, it lines up nicely that they can use divine magic like how Draconids use bead jewels to summon the power of gods.
I've been thinking about this for a while now, but why are you still following this fanfic instead of just dropping it when you have complaints? I'm just trying to write for fun and yet you're here saying I've mutilated the lore of both stories. That's something we call creative liberties. Honestly, I don't see you complaining at Ridoux's Anos Voldigoad in the Eminence in Shadow fic which also features EiS world taking place in the Militia World. Just relax and have some fun. I know you may be a die-hard fan of both series, but you gotta chill, it ain't that deep. If you really don't like how I do things in MY fanfic, why not make your own fanfic, with your own story direction and world building.
The lore shall reveal itself in due time. As for the reason why I made it the same world is because: (1) It would be a lot simpler. TBATE doesn't exactly say in detail how other world reincarnation works, and I'd also have to combine that with the Silver Sea. If Agrona knew about other worlds, that would mean TBATE is in an evolved Silver Bubble, not on the zero(th) layer. Combine that with the Militia world being in the zero(th) layer, and that's a nightmare I don't want to explain; (2) Combining their mechanics is quite easy. I could just say Thunder God's Wrath is an imitation of the original Jirasd. Also in my previous/first fanfic (also on webnovel), I did explain how both worlds' mechanics could be combined pretty easily; (3) If it was another world, that would mean Agrona purposely tampered with Anos' reincarnation and made him reincarnate in Dicathen. I think the only reason why he would even bother with the Legacy is because it was powerful but still something he could control, Anos on the hand... Well, it won't take a genius to take a guess; (4) And finally, this is still a FanFic. Somewhere I can write whatever I want and call it canon in my universe. I try to have fun in making these, and trying too hard to make it make sense would take the fun out of it. Sorry for the long post
Okay, first, let's start off with the writing quality. I think there's much to improve upon. The shift in perspective every paragraph is very confusing and hard to read. I recommend using a 3rd person style of writing since not only can you still write a character's thoughts, you can also differentiate them without making the text too confusing. Also, I suggest adding some more descriptive paragraphs to make the world feel more lifelike.As for story development, it's okay. There isn't much to complain about. Now for character design, I thought it would be the real Anos Voldigoad being transported to Tensura instead of a random reincarnated person with his looks and powers. But hey, I'll take what any Maou Gakuin fanfics I can find on this site. Yeah, that's about it.
For your first suggestion, I won't say much but I'll be putting some foreshadowing to hint at the overarching plot as to why that won't work. As for your second, this is my horrid attempt at writing some romance. I don't know if I'll be able to write some cute romance but I'll try (don't judge me).
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