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this sounds like a terrible idea...if something does attack the family members..they might start thinking they have awakened only to go get killed at the hunters guild. but this author doesnt think about this stuff
ok dude..what are these random words that arent words? is that what you think women sound like? lol
what joke? it was less of a joke and more of a dumb remark..but okay dude
why are you using arifureta as a comparison? their are a ton of solo leveling stories..lots of them infact. this one is unique. their is an outside force trying to rid the world of anything that isnt Nox. the MC will be going from world to world to basically save the universe. arifureta isnt like that at all. infact..he does everything he is doing with annoying companions..just to go home. that's it. his big plan..is going home. this is league's better then arifureta..its not even close.
this story is great Crocs. however...Damien is your main character of course. but he isnt your ONLY main character. I'm still on the primordial unending tree chapters right now..aka "struggle 8" to be exact. dont know what you got after this but..Please do not neglect Elena and Rose. sure..damien is having regrets on how he treated them..but what exactly are they doing right now? we need continuous updates on your other main characters. they are just as important as Damien is..on their road to strength and seemingly war. they are important too. Please do not neglect Ruyue and Qing'er or Qin Tan either, once he decides to go visit them finally. For the same reasons. each and every character that had an impact on his life should stay in his life. dont just drop them off somewhere and be like "aite peace bro" Other than that. exceptional storytelling. keep it up Crocs!
again..you sound like you read this somewhere and not actually experienced any real relationships. co dependency is t inheritantly bad. infact. a woman who leans on her man is a good thing. they work together hand in hand. You sound like a Karen with 9 cats and needs to speak to a manager..any manager..immediately.
why did you even write this if he isnt doing anything with it? stop writing pointless things
this arc goes on longer than this desert does. author..does this end anytime soon..or is this just the book now? just a demon inside 2 fox girls that share a brain? and walk through deserts and torrential rain? I mean..to be honest that kinda sounds cool but that definitely sounds like a different book lol so..does this end or what?
I hate the way this sentence is written
dude you need to pay more attention to what you write
none of this is okay..she needs to act like a demon from time to time..and this is the scenario where she definitely should. she needs to put this leech in her place.
why do all of you web novel writers all equally write prude material? either let them bang or dont write it at all. this trope has to stop. you arent doing anyone any favors by writing like this. what is your goal here?