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"sales and marketing strategies were..." What's with this gpt written nonsense? Why are you making the MC a business mogul now? when did he have time to do this in between his training sessions to reach quasi kage at 13 or whatever? Get on with the plot already. You're 50 chapters in, and you've not done anything but expand on Hyuga organisation a bit.
"I fricking hate you, Rasa!" ... If you don't want to use profanities.... don't... Way to kill any immersion. Honestly, there's a lot wrong with this chapter. Why wouldn't Tsunade fight against puppets? Sasori is the one enemy she's equipped to battle currently. The MC senses a force of 1000 ninjas heading his way and doesn't alert his allies? No traps? No prepared seals? He deserves to die. Not for abandoning his allies, but for being stupid. How can you have a reincarnator's special skill be explosive shadow clones? Can you be more boring? And even then, you don't use explosives properly. And your use of seals... abysmal. Tenten had more imagination than you. A barrier? A durability buff? The MC could realistically pull out a lake of water from a scroll to deal with Magnet release, a chakra disturbance array to deal with chakra strings, a yin seal like Tsunade's for stored chakra, seals on his sword that make it cut through jutsus or make it fly back like Mjolnir. If you really wanted to awaken his chains through an emotional moment, why not actually injure Anko or Kakashi? Why would you give us this worthless moment where the MC's starts whining. "I fricking hate you, Raasa!" How am I supposed to respect this guy?
A story with a promising start that the author gave up on and wrote an ending for the sake of it being written. Abandoned plot threads, abandoned characters, and wasted time. The author repeats the following pattern: 1. Introduce new character/threat 2. Develop said character and get us interested in the plot. 3. Something else happens. 4. Hastily write a wrap-up summary of how the previous plot turned out and abandon the characters to maybe mention them again some 50 chaps later, like: "Hey, remember how shit my story was?" 5. Rinse, repeat, even with the main plot. Nothing gets a satisfying ending.