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UnreliableJones_2dCommentedCh 1 Hello Again (1)- UnreliableJones_2dReplied to UnreliableJones_
oh wait theyre talking about the woman LOL mb
Turning his head towards his mother to get a better look at her, he noticed she was quite beautiful. Not drop dead gorgeous but she had good features he took note of despite her looking exhausted from having just given birth. Blonde hair, blue eyes, a nice sculpted face, and sultry lips, she seemed to be at the height of her youth. - UnreliableJones_2dCommented
Reminds me of B.J. Blazkowicz from The Wolfenstein series kekw
Turning his head towards his mother to get a better look at her, he noticed she was quite beautiful. Not drop dead gorgeous but she had good features he took note of despite her looking exhausted from having just given birth. Blonde hair, blue eyes, a nice sculpted face, and sultry lips, she seemed to be at the height of her youth. - UnreliableJones_2dCommented
CRUELTY!
Wailing as loudly as I could, I confirmed to them that I was in fact not a stillborn. Did she have to hit me so hard? This was cruelty! Cruelty I say! - UnreliableJones_3dPosted
3 Chapters in, like always, and I have much too say about this novel It is absolutely amazing! The way I was able to imagine the location immediately thanks to the descriptions given by the author is immaculate, the way the first action scene is handled is perfection at its finest, just the sheer creativity found in this novel is something anybody would love to see. Although, a major problem I have is with the first chapter, filled with grammatical errors and improper usage of punctuation, so that gets a 4 stars. But other than that, the rest are perfect! TL;DR Give this sci-fi novel a read if you are one that enjoys action and robots!
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bro had just woken up and was given such a big task, good luck with that i guess
[You are in command of the Colossus. Order it.] - UnreliableJones_3dCommentedThe Evo System screen flared crimson, accompanied by a blaring siren.
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dude is living his childhood dream!
Seeing his sleek, obsidian black form reflected in the chamber wall, a thrill of excitement coursed through Kai, pushing back the lingering tendrils of panic. "First things first," he muttered, "get used to this new body." - UnreliableJones_3dCommentedKai lurched forward, panic rising in his throat. "Wait! Wait!" he rasped, his voice hoarse.
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you repeated a word here
[The consciousness of the Xerion has been activativated] - UnreliableJones_3dCommented
You could fix the grammar here!
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One thing I can recommend with this sentence is fixing it. Here is my rendition you could possibly use "Kai, why can't you focus on your job and get a promotion? Maybe start a family? This Mecha model obsession of yours is..." Just a little nitpick of mine!
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father and son moments!!
First, A memory from childhood, sharp and vivid. He knelt beside his father, a tiny hand reaching out to touch the gleaming metal of a miniature Gundam they'd built together. Laughter bubbled from his lips, lost in the vast emptiness. - UnreliableJones_3dPosted
3 Chapters in and all I can say is this. It just gives off the right vibes, you know? Both in the magic department and the drama department, it just does everything right! The writing is adequate, and so are the characters and the world; though, there could be some further adjustments, I do think this novel is worthy of the grandiose prize of getting a rating of 5 stars! TL;DR Good novel, give it a read if you love magic and all the sorts!
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Just from the first three chapters, I can already assume that the novel is gonna be a blast to read! The most important aspect of any novel: the way it is written. All I can say about that is the fact that it is PERFECT! The way things are described, the way the text is written just flows perfectly, it is just perfect all the way! The characters are also very complex and good to understand! The other aspects of the novel are very well handled, it was just a fun read overall; I can't wait to read more of this later TL;DR Good novel, make sure to read it if you have time to spare!
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5 chapters in this is what I can say. Absolutely incredible, the way the emotions are proudly written with elegance, the way the environments are described with perfection, everything is just perfect. I'll continue reading this for the foreseeable future, and I cannot wait for new chapters to come out! TL;DR GREAT NOVEL, MUST READ!
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