DaoistLORD_PARAGON
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I don't know how to write but i am very observant to silly mistakes so imma correct you if i find some and if your story is a disappointment not reaching my expectations I'll definitely abuse you
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DaoistLORD_PARAGON16hCommentedCh 8 8. Testing- DaoistLORD_PARAGON3dCommentedCh 6 First Quest.
- DaoistLORD_PARAGON14dCommentedCh 1 Malivoire Descent.
- DaoistLORD_PARAGON16dCommentedCh 9 Chapter 9: The plan part 2
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It's still too exagegerated... adjust it
After that, he lived his days completely shut off from communicating with anyone, even the terrible nurses who treated him badly and verbally abused him, knowing he couldn't defend himself. It wasn't until one day a lifeline appeared in the form of his professor from the university he had previously attended. - DaoistLORD_PARAGON21dCommentedCh 1 Advent of Astral Part 1: Creation
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Hmmm a possible omnipotent being making so many mistakes ?
This paragraph has been deleted. - DaoistLORD_PARAGON1mthCommented
Your writing skills needs improvement ,you should re write these pages later when you think your writing skill is good enough
they lid of the bin ripped off violently I looked up see my end before me and what I saw made my blood run cold. 5 meters tall, a white chitinous body with tan accents down its front and sides spikes decorated throughout, 4 legs each one ending with a sharp thick spike which could run a man through with ease a vertical torso with 2 scythe like appendages sharp enough clearly to cut through metal with no resistance, A head in a shape similar to a pentagon with small protrusions sticking out of the top in a row, teeth like ivory needles drenched in saliva and eyes black as void staring down into his own. - DaoistLORD_PARAGON1mthCommentedCh 22 So, How Do I Cook It?
- DaoistLORD_PARAGON1mthCommentedCh 18 Hellish Training
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Good novel! If you don't feel like it a stress then can you make the origin codex system like, just show his status, treasures , bloodline and stuff .just like the primordial record. ...it's not a system but i can calculate and record his grow like a system status. .. JS
Ch 17 Blowing His Cover - DaoistLORD_PARAGON1mthReplied to That_CultivatorCh 12 You Can't Use Me Girl
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Veron stood stone still, he wouldn't miss the next words out of her mouth for anything. His entire new domain could be crumbling and yet he wouldn't care. He had to know what she was going to say, and damned be the consequences. - DaoistLORD_PARAGON1mthCommentedCh 5 The 7 Paragons (part 2)
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"Here is where you will make the core of your world. You will place your hands on the sphere whereupon the creation system will be bound to you, and you will be given access to all the features available to rank 1 gods. You will learn more about those ranks and their abilities later on, but for now just focus on building the world you want to make. Now remember, to this new world you ARE God. Set whatever rules you like, make things the way you want them to be. But be warned, the rules you make will bind you. God cannot break his own law." - DaoistLORD_PARAGON1mthCommentedCh 12 You Can't Use Me Girl