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MoonlightBomber

MoonlightBomber

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An indie game developer and writer. Has a fondness for RPGs and visual novels. Also a collector of stuff. Support me on Ko-fi: https://ko-fi.com/moonlightbomber

2022-03-12 JoinedPhilippines
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber11mth
    Replied to Areku14

    It's how everything is perceived in this post-truth era.

    He thought about all the posts he saw on various forums and social media and how chaotic they were. It was a sea of constant bickering. No one accepted any source as reliable anymore, yet few were willing to do any verification themselves. It was as if humanity was stuck in a limbo state, seeing more and more information but refusing to evaluate what was true and false anymore. Instead, everybody stuck to their prior beliefs as a default because it was easier. In the end, this only created greater tension and divided the populace further than ever before.
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    My Pick Up Artist System
    Urban · SamsaraWithWords
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber1yr
    Posted

    So, my initial impressions. The setting is good, the characters are good, but the beginning needs to have a little more punch. I can understand you employing the third-person perspective to narrate what is going on, but if you want to get your readers hooked more, the opening need to have this "personal touch", And finally, you need to fix the synopsis. Just tell who are the main players and what they are playing, and not just cut and paste an excerpt.

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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber1yr
    Posted

    Isekai. A dumb protagonist, who hopefully will wise up. A system of cultivation in place. Overall, this makes for a slow burn in terms of pacing, but I expect the developments, character-wise and plot-wise, to become better and better.

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    Supreme Harem Hunter
    Action · StumblingtoSuccess
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber1yr
    Posted

    As I'm a straight guy and not a fan of BL by default, I am normally not interested in this. But in the first chapter, I can see the establishment of the pairing right off the bat, and while it's predictable, this bodes well for the rest of the story.

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    (BL) My Evil Werewolf System
    LGBT+ · Pinkyprincess
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber1yr
    Posted

    Right off the bat, we see clear POVs from the two main characters. This way, we readers can clearly see their thoughts ad motivations that will eventually tie them together.

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    My boyfriend can control the darkness
    Fantasy · funkiller_562
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber1yr
    Posted

    While there are some tiny, tiny nitpicks I can spot, this novel is off to a great start. Great use of the first-person POV that truly defines the MC's personality.

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    LetMeRegress - Don't read this
    Fantasy · daniz_
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber1yr
    Posted

    A strong start, and an intricately-designed system that is not designed to be too cryptic. The way Japan is portrayed is also good enough as a fan of Japanese media myself. Will look forward to what happens next.

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    The Magitek System
    Fantasy · MosbyYors
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber1yr
    Posted

    This novel has a strong and comprehensible beginning, with the protagonist's motivation for his adventure already set up in just two chapters. Hope this keeps up.

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    Renowned
    Fantasy · Efenay
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber1yr
    Posted

    The first four chapters should clue you in to a straightforward yet strong start. We get the in medias res beginning of how a teacher ended up with a vampire, and how the story's immediate world is plagued by ghouls. I also can appreciate the use of the present tense in narration, and the presentation and flow are well-written and easy to understand. I can't wait to know what happens next.

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    My Students Are Vampires!
    Fantasy · Little_Foxxy
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber1yr
    Posted

    So far, after reading 300+ chapters, I give my take. The characters are good, the worldbuilding is good, and the lovemaking scenes can be pretty hot. The only faults I can find are Lawrend being kind of a dolt at times and Humility's... uh... quirks.

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    Combat Maid Harem
    Fantasy · Daoist_Little_Yun
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber1yr
    Posted

    Even though I'm a straight guy and generally don't care for LGBT+ stories that are not on the L side of things, the first few chapters are well-built, giving a solid foundation to what will happen next. Furthermore, the fact that there is already an established transmigration/reincarnation organization pleased me.

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    Infinite Transmigration
    LGBT+ · Theomancy
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber1yr
    Commented

    Note: Later on in the story, transformations will consume 1 Burning Vigor gauge. In-game, transformations can consume 1 BV gauge or not, depending on the player's settings.

    Ch 60 S5E13: The Masterminds Are Revealed / Kankyou Keiji Acousaider, Part 1
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    The Daig'digaia Saga: Fifty Adventurers Come Together!
    Games · MoonlightBomber
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber1yr
    Commented

    I thought Humility would be a lethal chef, judging from the title

    Ch 211 Humility's Cooking
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    Combat Maid Harem
    Fantasy · Daoist_Little_Yun
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber1yr
    Posted

    While it's plagued by some missing commas, the story doesn't beat around the bush in establishing what kind of character Gerald is. He may be the laughingstock of his rich family, but I expect him to be a "crouching tiger, hidden dragon" type of rich man.

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    The Good Gerald White
    Realistic · justanotherauthor
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber1yr
    Commented

    Yeah, I admit this was the raunchiest chapter I've ever wrote. And because of that, some perv might write a much more explicit version of this chapter.

    Ch 44 S4E12: The Virus's Challenge to Their Lives, Part 5
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    The Daig'digaia Saga: Fifty Adventurers Come Together!
    Games · MoonlightBomber
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber1yr
    Posted

    The Easter Carnival led me to this comic, and I'm floored at what the MC is. He has the right amount of badass, he has the right amount of smug, and he has the right amount of care and concern to people who should be protected the most. Can't wait to read more.

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    Pick Your Campus Queen
    · iciyuan
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber2yr
    Posted

    Strong, action-packed beginning. Serious maids doing combat. What more you can ask for? While the grammar and paragraph implementation could use some improvement, it's still a fun read.

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    253rd Maid Brigade: A Graceful Yet Deadly Maiden
    Fantasy · Sandwich_Author
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber2yr
    Posted

    Judging from the premise alone, I think your story was inspired by another cat character from Sword Art Online Abridged, who coincidentally is also named Fluffles (but is male instead of female). But still, both cats are deadly, and so I look forwards to what happens next.

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    How a Cat Created the Strongest Guild
    Games · Kain_Xander
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber2yr
    Posted

    Basically put, this is "Never Mess With Granny", the LitRPG. Also, the premise of this novel reminds me of the grandma who loves to play Skyrim, and how she captured other players' hearts. Flora, the MC, is basically the same. She's endearing.

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    Auntie toasts the VRMMORPG
    Games · Joan_Ninja_Hen
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  • MoonlightBomber
    MoonlightBomber2yr
    Posted

    I really like the idea where the man and his harem are on par with each other in terms of fighting ability. And seeing what I've read so far, this story has some good prospects.

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    Sword King In A Women's World
    · Animation Dong
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