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Xiazuun16dCommentedwhy couldn't adams.name be David
"Adam... When you fought Prime Stone Goliath you looked so cool, I wish I could be as strong as you someday." Felix said in embarrassment.- Xiazuun1mthCommented
didn't he have 500 cuz he showed up first
Zeras signed looking at his points which has changed from 400 to 0. - Xiazuun4mthCommented
I'm starting to wonder if he is the MCs Grandfather
"Is he really that powerful ?" The blond man gulped audibly, his throat suddenly feeling parched after hearing his prideful superior speak so. This was a man who firmly believed in the superiority of humans over Gifteds, yet he was now acknowledging the power of Zero. - Xiazuun4mthPosted
It's a little different... The main premise is a guy in a modern world, with an rpg system, wants to be the strongest. This is basically this individuals story of how he gets there. Obviously not finished yet. The grammar, syntax, etc are all okay. Easy to read. Some things are repeated WAY to much. The worlds description and breakdown of the environments suck blue monkey balls, as in they are bad. For the most part the descriptions are not there. As of 99 chapters in, there is zero character growth... as in personality or what's makes the character. The rpg part obviously has really fast growth. The world really wasn't well thought out and doesn't really make sense. For example the way characters help others level but it supposedly takes forever to level up. IT DOES NOT AT ALL! Characters are going from 1 to 400 in like 4 months, wtf! The way organizations act towards other organizations and people is kind of bland. Honestly, just kill everyone, it seems to be ok. The MC is stupid, by that I mean borderline mentally handicapped. How do you want to be something all your life and at essentially 20 years old have ZERO knowledge on that topic. Zero knowledge of ANY enemies, they must still have the internet based off the setting. Increase the poor Mc's intelligence some. Have him make some non rpg growth. Skill acquisition is to crazy with no limitations, should have put some limit such as only being able to have a certain amount. At that point he can trade out for stronger ones etc. would have been better. A nice premise with similarities to other stories but give it a read and help the author improve. Story has potential but a rewrite would help.
- Xiazuun5mthCommented
nerd
'Perfect! Now my real magic training begins!' - Xiazuun5mthReplied to Bladedsquirrel1
I almost dropped the story good thing I didn't
Shang continued down the street absentmindedly. - Xiazuun5mthReplied to Coheed27
it's shang not alex
'Sure enough, I can easily support my own weight. This body is quite powerful and still pretty light. I don't want to admit it, but this body is probably even better suited for survival and combat than my old one.' - Xiazuun5mthReplied to Ethglade
yes
One was a bulging sack, and the other was the black cube the God had given him. - Xiazuun5mthReplied to Eclipse_Ranger
miraj in a mirage in the deserr
[A/N: I tweaked the spelling for Mirage a bit because later, there will be a desert arc. It will be very confusing when MC will talk about real mirages then.] - Xiazuun5mthCommented
if he's a prince why doesn't he have a bloodline
Bloodline: N/A - Xiazuun6mthReplied to Galanteo
- Xiazuun6mthReplied to Bernard_Serkist
I'm 5 foot 8
He rose swiftly from his seated position and stepped out of the capsule. Standing at a tall stature of 1.79 meters (5.88 feet), he had a slender frame yet it was clear that his muscles were well-developed from all the hard work he had done so far. - Xiazuun6mthCommented
being fat
'This is such bullshit… what the hell did I even do to deserve this?' - Xiazuun7mthCommented"Hey, is it true that The White Fangs are challenging the boss today?" Arthur's ears perked up upon catching a fragment of conversation nearby. Intrigued, he listened intently, but the duos drifted away before he could glean any further information.
- Xiazuun8mthReplied to J_S_9078
ok
[Prosperity: 727/100] - Xiazuun8mthCommented
how he did the interview ingame
The man let out a bitter laugh. "To be honest, you left right after you saved the girl, without leaving any information. We have tried everything to find you these past few days, to no avail. It wasn't until a local TV station aired a report that we learned you are a player of the Godslayer game. We got your contact information from the TV station." - Xiazuun8mthReplied to Shadow_Mongrel
iIthink that was for equipment this is for skills etc
Grey(Poor) Talent, White(Common) Talent, Green(Uncommon) Talent, Blue(Rare) Talent, Purple(Epic) Talent, Orange(Legendary) Talent, and Gold(Divine) Talent. - Xiazuun9mthReplied to ArrkeinThe Lower District had 30 areas. From 21 to 50. It housed the working class and the poor who lived from pay check to pay check. The population was 300 million.
- Xiazuun9mthReplied to Follower_of_Abadom
I'm srry I had to
'That was why I invested almost all of my current money in the Trade Center...' - Xiazuun9mthReplied to Arrkein
that what they want you to know
The Lower District had 30 areas. From 21 to 50. It housed the working class and the poor who lived from pay check to pay check. The population was 300 million.