it doesn't flow very well and the added space between punctuation doesn't help

don't care. she belongs to the streets

just wanna write despite it not being updated in a while. I hope author comes back and finishes it, I found this to be a great fic. I would read in the author notes of people always complaining about one thing or another but I just quite literally don't care and pretty much agree with almost everything the author did. The only thing I'd change is just have a smaller harem so that some members or even children aren't excluded for tons of chapters at a time.

doesn't really matter? at the time they made the comment it was ruined, you just fixed it. You really only proved them right

terrible pacing, constant spelling errors, and worst of all boring multiple bodies. I always hate stories where the mc has multiple bodies with different capabilities that don't share. it'd be different if everything shared but the base points but that isn't that case and that makes it boring. This fic straight up reminds me of young master Chinese fics and nothing interesting is really explored, hell the premise was supposed to be making systems but now mc makes them, takes over the body of the person who gets them, and then lives as that person for like 30 chapters while taking over other bodies, even in the most recent chapter mc makes a new body to get captured so his orginal body isn't but the new body has different abilities somehow

Does anyone know any similar stories? as while I love the premise this story is kinda ass. I hate the mc and the system is boring because it isn't random which I think would make the story much more interesting. I also don't like how weak overall the mc is and while sure he has the potential to be OP but the system is made in a way for him to only be op when the author wants him to be. Also the way the mc handled the whole nabu thing just felt... cringe? like in those Chinese cultivation novels where mc has to have people congratulate this young master for doing good and always one step ahead of everyone else without explaining himself so he can be smug

this is the rewrite? the grammar is terrible.

yeah... I can tell

Author desperately needs an editor, this story would be so much more enjoyable if it wasn't so scuffed grammatically. I will never understand how it has such a high rating despite this

it's getting tiring with this whole back and forth between Adam and them. Didn't Adam say he was just gonna throw caution to the wind and trust first? it's boring and repetitive, besides who else in bleach would you trust over urahara

I just went through the comments and I saw like one person say that it was useless and filler, while like 50 authors were saying thanks for the chapter and loved it... Why let one person bring about an outburst like this?

not a fan, especially if they have personality. If he makes an army of golems it could work but it's still kinda boring

With the rate Dachi is growing post time skip he should be stronger almost every character in naruto especially if him holding back makes hiruzen think he'd be kage level in a few years

I'm pretty sure the reason why he became so evil is because of him being immortal iirc and since they found out he was immortal as a baby....

??? it's called growing up its not foreshadowing. People grow up in a 7 year time skip

Truthfully the only bad thing about the trials was how short and easy they were that they might as well not exist, however this author kinda does skip out on some more fulfilling details so its expected

yeah but if I was quirkless I wouldn't dream of becoming a hero while doing nothing about it, I just simply wouldn't be a hero

it was to unlock some power or something, he basically pretended to mug uncle Ben to make Peter learn his lesson without Ben dying

As good as this is I can't say for certain I like it more than the others other work. I hope he doesn't drop it to work on this longer :(

oh I would also love more side stories oh either mc or mc and others visiting other worlds and actually interacting a bit with it, just little short stories or whatever