Nice story but is pretty much a blatant copy of another story. Give us originality please

The language they're using is killing me, good lord. Why are they speaking like wannabe-cool immature teenagers in the first place? Aren't they supposed to be in an era where Nobility Hierarchy is strict? Where is the decorum with the characters? This urgently needs a rewrite

Hope you get well soon Author! We will be awaiting for your return!

Dropped?

Dropped?

Dropped?

Is this dropped Author?

TFTC!

He didn't lose any pupil power?

Dropped?

Is this dropped?

Welcome back author-san, glad you recovering well enough to post chpas now

Does anyone have the new acc of the author? Can't seem to find it

Ngl I feel it's quite a waste to not have him become a subordinate since it's practically free as he just needs to teach him and every point is quite valuable considering the op stuff he can get from the shop (if I remeber correctly)

Is the novel dropped?

Thanks for the chapter!

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+1

Just finished reading all the 9 available chapters and it actually looks promising. Though its a little bit confusing to follow who is speaking due to the format on how the author writes and a bit too fast for my liking, these are just my preferences. The novel is also still in it’s early stages so I cant really fault it for these. If the author can dive into world lore and give characters personalities, I am sure this novel can go big. Suggestions(just my own preferences) Slow down on the pace Give characters personalities by giving more details on how, what, and why they think in certain ways Make it so it’s clear who is speaking Enrich the world lore NO NTR AND HAREM OMFG IM SICK OF THIS I DONT CARE IF THE LOVE INTEREST IS A GIRL OR BOY JUST PLS NOT NTR AND HAREM (The only acceptable harem is if it only contains 2-3 love interests) Vague and ambiguous Bromance and YURI😏 Pls dont make the mcs be so op right off the bat Healthy and friendly between the 4 mcs (W/ BOUNDARIES!!) That’s all! I wish the author the best of luck!

Finished all the current chapters and and it can be considered good among the novels in this app. Personall, I think that the idea is good, if not great but the execution is a bit subpar. Idk if I am just used to systems who are monotone but I think that giving emotions to a system is a bad move. Generally, the characterization of the characters are also subpar. I suggest reading novels and comics to better improve and understand on how chracters of certain status act and the likes. The grammar could also use a lot of work so maybe considering hiring an editor if you have the capital. If not then at the very least google the word that you’re going to use or use quillbor/grammarly. I see a lor of potential in this story so keep up the work author and never be deterred by mistakes as we are human and we all make mistakes. As long as you can use the them in improving yourself then nothing is a problem.