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DaoistSrynko1mthCommentedUgh, destiny is the worst concept to appear in webnovels. It’s just an excuse for authors to excessively use plot armor and contrivances…
[You have two chances to steal other's fate. When you kill a target that can have its life stolen, you will automatically steal their destiny.]- DaoistSrynko4mthCommented
Imma slap the author over the head with THE BOOK
As soon as he freed the book, his pain subsided. He thought for a few moments before picking up the book again, but this time, he only held the book with his right hand. - DaoistSrynko4mthCommented
Bro, is this novel written for people with some sort of mental impairment ? What on god‘s earth are those sentences
After he picked up the book with his right hand, he placed his left hand on it to hold the book with both hands. - DaoistSrynko6mthPosted
I like the setting, but it went downhill from there. Some points: 1) zero background information on the MC, comes from earth that’s it. 2) like the MC, apparently nobody has any connections left from earth like friends or family 3) Timeline is a mess, you never know how many days passed since the beginning 4) The way people get stronger is very abstract and kind of missmatched 5)Nobody ever trains but all the people from earth can suddenly fight with swords and spears 6) MC rap*s every female he meets 7) All female characters are c*m dumps with no other significant traits 8) After a while the author gives up putting numbers on any resource because he is too lazy to keep track 9) A bunch of plot holes, like forgetting characters/ units, MC doing the opposite of what he said a chapter ago etc 10) The female knight from the title plays 0 role in the novel 11) Very long s*x scenes filled with metaphors: trembling peaks and rising dragons 12) Poor naming sense 13) Stilted, unnatural dialogue
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Going to reveal yourself to everyone, dark lords and hero’s, as a dragon lord? Excellent choice….. moron
[Divine Dragon Dark Lord (Ethan): You'll know when the time comes.] - DaoistSrynko6mthCommented
??????? A couple chapters ago MC (correctly) assumed that attacking riverside would draw wayyyy to much attention. But it is good to see his memory has degraded to that of a water flea
"In the early hours of the morning, three days from now, I will launch an attack on Riverside." - DaoistSrynko6mthCommented
Wearing a black uniform with a black dragon symbol, to go fight a black dragon….. whatever could they be up to? MC must have fell on his head a lot.
Although Ethan didn't quite understand why the Bounty Guild was doing this, it was impolite to refuse a gift. - DaoistSrynko6mthReplied to GentsPlsDontLaugh
Yup
Once the quest was completed, Ethan ordered another shot of liquor at the bar, drinking heavily while planning his next move. - DaoistSrynko6mthCommented
Just saying: This dude was probably an office worker a week back. How is he behaving like he grew up around mideval slaughter
"Unfortunately, I don't need the loyalty of the weak." - DaoistSrynko6mthCommented
Can we finally get a timeline here? What do you mean years?
"Your guild is currently the lowest E-rank guild. The highest is S-rank, and only one such guild exists in our Sunset Empire. However, do not underestimate Riverside, as three B-rank guilds, primarily made up of Heroes, have emerged in recent years. They are expected to be promoted to A-rank in the near future." - DaoistSrynko6mthReplied to DaoistSrynkoCh 47 Chapter46-The Egg of the Divine Wing Dragon
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So: 1) Author mentioned the heroes leave their gold in the camp before the fight and MC did not loot it. 2) MC has no scouts around his base? 3) Every fully discovered region gave a treasure chest, now it does not? 4)Baymax is C, how did he defeat 4 C and 1 C+ hero so easily? 5) Why did he not private trade and made it a public listing? 6) So magic skills can be learned and bought? Is there a power difference?
Ch 47 Chapter46-The Egg of the Divine Wing Dragon - DaoistSrynko6mthCommented
How’s there food in a store after 5 years? neither taken nor spoiled?
The two of them packed many boxes of food into their hands and they went out to the back of the store. There was a car parked there and Miss Kim put all the boxes inside before they drove off. - DaoistSrynko6mthPosted
To be honest: it‘s utterly unreadable. I love the setting, and the story might have potential but the authors grasp of the English language is insufficient. Horrendous grammar and limited vocabulary. If you want to salvage this novel you need to get an editor to rewrite the entire thing. As it stands now, the quality is around the level of a machine translated novel.
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Try offering- I think, weird sentence again
Henry didn't even try ordering to answer the doubts that Adam had. Instead, he handed Adam the axe. - DaoistSrynko6mthCommented
Fictional/ CGI
But, this was absolutely the first time that he was seeing a human doing magic live. Although he had seen this happening in movies, that was of course acting and not real. - DaoistSrynko6mthCommented
Theme park/ zoo
In his mind, Adam thought that, perhaps, a pack of wolves had escaped from a game park. And since they were ferocious, it was obvious that they would kill humans in case they met them. - DaoistSrynko6mthCommented
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Second and third sentence are nonsense
Adam, on the other hand, had been looking at Henry for a period of time now. He wondered what kind of behavior Henry possessed now. He had been staring at the air In front of him consecutively. And each time, he would stay that way for a long period of time. - DaoistSrynko6mthCommented
That’s the case - try using the short form
"Oh, since that is the case, then I can use an axe. These muscles of mine really want something that is heavy. And I like swinging a lot." Adam replied.