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  • Hozy
    Hozy11d
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    Well, here we go. I really like what you did with the MC, starting with his power level. In particular, I'm tired of stories where the MC is extremely strong at the beginning and the authors have to nerf him in some way so he doesn't simply sweep away everything he finds in his path, or worse, they make him invincible, which is pretty boring. . His development is also good, especially when he stops thinking of people as mere pieces that he can use as he wishes. The characters themselves are very faithful to the canon, with obviously better depth to them, as well as giving more details to their thoughts and their respective personalities. The plot is also good, well constructed and captivating, which I won't go into too much detail here so as not to spoil the experience for someone who wants to start reading.

    Dragon Ball Alternative
    Anime & Comics · Equuleus_Nox
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  • Hozy
    Hozy1mth
    Commented

    This phrase would have much more weight and effect if the DBZ universe hadn't trivialized death. Did someone die? Just use the dragon balls to revive them, no matter how many times they died before (in the beginning you could only revive them once, but they received several buffs and now there is no limit). This is not a criticism of the story btw <3

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    Dragon Ball Alternative
    Anime & Comics · Equuleus_Nox
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  • Hozy
    Hozy1mth
    Commented

    WELCOME BACK !!!

    Chapter 60- Why We Should Go to Namek: a Thesis
    Dragon Ball Alternative
    Anime & Comics · Equuleus_Nox
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  • Hozy
    Hozy1mth
    Commented

    Honestly? You shouldn't call people wanting to control their story, we can't please everyone. Write what you think is best, don't feel pressured by random randoms who want to control what happens in your story. She's getting really good! At least, I like what I see so far and the expectations from when I started the story until this current chapter have not been disappointed.

    Ch 20 20 - Emergency
    Anti-NTR Man: Kokujin No Tenkousei NTR Ru VERSUS
    Anime & Comics · Hazy_0832
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  • Hozy
    Hozy3mth
    Commented

    Author, I confess that I feel sorry for how Po will be treated by the MC (based on his personality presented so far). Like, he was a civilian 1 month ago, it's bizarre how much he grew up basically "from scratch". I really hope he gets the love he deserves in this fic, since, in similar fics, he's simply thrown to the sidelines or played purely as comic relief.

    Ch 18 Faith
    More than a Dragon Warrior
    Movies · Emmanuel_Capricorn
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  • Hozy
    Hozy3mth
    Replied to Creus_Sun

    Maybe it's the author playing with Tai Lung's POV being biased, and that things won't be 100% accurate or go as he expects? For example, something might happen in the future that makes this "creating a clan" plan irrelevant or impractical.

    Ch 18 Faith
    More than a Dragon Warrior
    Movies · Emmanuel_Capricorn
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  • Hozy
    Hozy3mth
    Commented

    It's cool to see a strong character and all, but I really hope things don't go the way Tai Lung wants. You know those stories where everything the MC says and wants, he always achieves without any problems? I really hope that's not entirely the case here. But anyway, good chapter!

    Ch 16 Failure
    More than a Dragon Warrior
    Movies · Emmanuel_Capricorn
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  • Hozy
    Hozy3mth
    Replied to Hozy

    Seija***

    Ch 56 56: Number One
    System Breaker of the Shinobi World
    Anime & Comics · JSK_Wilson
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  • Hozy
    Hozy3mth
    Replied to JSK_Wilson

    Basically, she is already completely developed, we readers already have a clear idea of ​​who "Seika" is, her personality, her short-term goals and some actions she will take. That doesn't mean it's "cliché" or predictable, I for one am loving the turn of recent events, which is something I'm very excited to see unfold. As for the other reincarnators, we know almost nothing. We know some powers and some bits of their personalities, but you, as the author, have HUGE writing freedom about them. I specified Reincarnator 2 because it stands out among them, as you gave some details about it that gives us space to theorize with these few details, and I have MANY theories about it.

    Ch 56 56: Number One
    System Breaker of the Shinobi World
    Anime & Comics · JSK_Wilson
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  • Hozy
    Hozy3mth
    Commented

    Author, I'm going to give this unpopular opinion and leave without elaborating: Reincarnator 2 (Senku) is the character with the most narrative potential so far.

    Ch 56 56: Number One
    System Breaker of the Shinobi World
    Anime & Comics · JSK_Wilson
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  • Hozy
    Hozy3mth
    Replied to DarkNacho

    You just forgot the part that appeared in the global chat that reincarnator 1 killed 15, if she tried to use that disguise, it would be discovered very quickly.

    Ch 56 56: Number One
    System Breaker of the Shinobi World
    Anime & Comics · JSK_Wilson
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  • Hozy
    Hozy3mth
    Commented

    Good chapter. I just wanted to leave an addendum: In hentai in general, the bad endings usually happen when the WOMAN is blackmailed/hypnotized/cheats on her husband, who 99% of the time is not "enough" to satisfy her, as she is the woman in the relationship (assuming she ends up dating a boy, which I think is easier than ending up with a girl) she has a high chance of a "good ending", since she still has the system to help her. But it's just my opinion. Keep up the good work, author! <3

    Ch 5 School Life I
    Surviving the Hentai world
    Anime & Comics · Garus49
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  • Hozy
    Hozy3mth
    Posted

    This story is much better and deserves more attention than it gets. I thought that too many reincarnators would make the story confusing and boring, but the author manages to make the world breathe on its own, without the need for EVERYTHING to revolve around the MC. The world building is well done, even if the details of the current war/plot are scarce, but I believe that over time, as the characters become more integrated into the "main plot", it will be more in-depth. The characters are very charismatic and unique. Overall, a hidden gem, I loved this story. Looking forward to the next chapters <3

    System Breaker of the Shinobi World
    Anime & Comics · JSK_Wilson
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  • Hozy
    Hozy11mth
    Commented

    So far so good, it seems to have a lot of potential from the way it's being developed. I wonder if in this pokémon world they already have the knowledge of all the species that we know, or if there are holes, as presented in several stories. For example, not knowing Sylveon.

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  • Hozy
    Hozy11mth
    Replied to GrandMasterOogway

    Author, I recommend tagging 'pokemon'. It makes it much easier for new people to find it because I, for example, found it by luck. If it had the tag, it would be much faster.

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  • Hozy
    Hozy11mth
    Commented

    About the titles... If you want, you can adopt the scheme of numbering them only. It creates a bit of mystery about what the next chapter is hiding.

    Ch 49 C049 - Schooling the professor and getting schooled by his wife
    Pokemon: A life worth living
    Video Games · Nuclide
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  • Hozy
    Hozy11mth
    Commented

    Thanks for the chapter ^^ Anyway, I agree with King_Young's comment above. The romance feels kind of pushed and rushed, also kind of unnatural. Vivian's forcing this into every possible interaction with the MC is also kind of exhausting, as we already know what she's going to do when she enters the scene. Try to make the romance more subtle, not so forced, more in the background. You are doing an excellent job so far. All other focuses besides romance are fair. After all, highlighting only the negative aspects discourages people a lot. The plot is having a good pace; the world building is being nice to see; the pokemon may have disappeared a bit lately, but that's forgivable because the focus isn't so much on them in these last few chapters; the reverence for the legendary and their importance in this fic is sensational, especially when we remember what might be happening to Tobias in this world; etc. Of course, this is just my opinion.

    Ch 49 C049 - Schooling the professor and getting schooled by his wife
    Pokemon: A life worth living
    Video Games · Nuclide
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  • Hozy
    Hozy11mth
    Replied to Nuclide

    Was the Milotic that ate the scale male or female?

    Ch 47 C047 - Whitney's first visit to the farm
    Pokemon: A life worth living
    Video Games · Nuclide
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  • Hozy
    Hozy11mth
    Commented

    Thanks for the chapter ^^ Just now I realized that I'm reading one of the rare fic that don't put nicknames on pokemon.

    Ch 47 C047 - Whitney's first visit to the farm
    Pokemon: A life worth living
    Video Games · Nuclide
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  • Hozy
    Hozy11mth
    Replied to Nuclide

    There are some very interesting concepts there, I can think of two off the top of my head: one is an island where there are fruits that change the color of a pokemon to pink, regardless of the species, and another would be a submerged cave where there are Crystal Onix that can swim.

    Ch 45 C045 - A legendary blessing
    Pokemon: A life worth living
    Video Games · Nuclide
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