DarkCyan
A Darker Shade Of Cyan
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If you want to drop after the first mini arc (ends at chapter-16), I will have nothing to cry about. But please give it a try till then. Also, thanks for giving this a try <3
It's a spoiler, but I'll spoil you anyway. The system is a default game system, and the one forcing quests on MC dies off pretty soon.
Thanks for the honest review <3 Actually, I agree with the pacing issue. I know the pacing might seem a bit slow, but I believe the payoff would be worth it in the end! Now, I don't think I made the MC seem too bland, and I find it really unfortunate that you think so. Plus, the system thing isn't a "system" kind of system. It is the default RPG system from the game, and the forcefulness goes away with a big reveal at the end of the 1st mini-arc (Chapters 14-15). I really hope you give it one more chance to impress you. Thanks again!
First of all, thank you for giving this novel a try. I really appreciate it <3 Also, I'm very sad to know that you dropped it this early. Please try to continue to chapter 10, and if I still can't hook you to this story, I'll admit that I'm absolutely incompetent as an Author.
It's not the "Heaven" from Christian myth. "Heaven" has a different meaning in eastern fantasy, which is similar to "Sky" or "So powerful that they seem unreachable like the skies above".
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Fate/Stay Night - Heaven's Feel Series.
It's not actually an invite, per se. I've put it in the author's note of the latest chapter. But for you, I'll mention the game here too. You need to guess the MC's master plan to get himself out of the predicament he willingly entered, or how he's going to get into Etheria unharmed. If the guess is correct, you can customize a Hero character (gender, appearance, special quirks etc.). That's the entire game. All clues are available in the story, so no plot armor will be involved in MC's plan.
What else can I say? Other than "blatant plaizarism" of course! Writing Quality: If you feed the original story "The Demon Prince Goes To The Academy" into chatGPT, that will have much better writing quality than the broken, horrible writing from this work. In short, the author is clearly inept to write in English, or use grammarly. Update Stability: It's not contracted yet, so this part of the review is meaningless for now. Story Development: Exactly the SAME, yet still worse than the original work. When I saw the author saying it changes from chapter 10, I tried reading it. I persevered through the broken writing, read till ch16, and found..... PLOT HOLES OF GALACTIC SCALE. The original work didn't have those plot holes, but because this author tried changing the story after copy pasting the 1st 10 chapters, it became inconsistent. The weirdness of him manipulating demons goes unnoticed, plus he gets to meet AND dine with the Emperor without having a single "dispel" cast on him. Plus, his disguise is based on scroll magic, so it shouldn't last for days. But it somehow does in this story! Damn! Why have a story anymore? The crisis is averted forever, isn't it? World Background: Dunno, but after reading author's improvisation in the first 16chapters, it would be copied with a different name anyway. Character Design: Copied from the original. All characters, except author's improvisation, of course! All in all, an insult to the original novel, by saying that this is an original work and making it so bad. This is a fan-fic of the original "The Demon Prince Goes To The Academy", and a very poorly written one. If someone wants to argue about what's fanfic and what's not, just read "The Novel's Extra" and "The Author's POV". The latter "took inspiration" from the former, but it's not a fanfic, because the entire plot premise (except the concept) is different. The chapters are not copied in a terrible way, and TAPOV is an improvement from TNE. But this work is plainly far worse than the original it took inspiration (plagiarized) from, and adds nothing (yes, nothing. The demon domination ability suddenly requires "control" to dominate demons, and what's this hideous counterpart of Archdemon race?) to the story. It just shows you a broken possibility of what could've happened if the characters were beyond stupid and Valier jr. (Reinhardt) didn't slip away from the princess. So, I would say this is a fan-fic, without any logic, of course!