the story line was good and the grammar had a little bit mistakes but not to serious, the charather design was little but bland so i suggest to improve it then the world background was perfect, then the story development was still undecided since it was still on early stage then tha update stability it was good so everthing is 5/5

still on hiatus just wait lol

tnx I decided to slowly reveal his backstory since if I wrote all of it, it will take 100+ chapters or more

yeah but Daniel had a reason... just wait for his backstory btw thank you for reading [img=recommend]

No, I'm talking about people who didn't do anything serious crime like kill someone and stuff. Of course, there are also real innocent victims, such as the victims of the orphanage massacre (which is what Daniel said earlier)

it's back

what is confusing?

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open your discord

The way the author writes the scenery is a little bad but still readable. I can see a lot of mistakes I mean a lot but the author says she will update them so let's just wait. I rarely read an FL novel but this one is good but due to grammar mistakes and poor writing it became a little bad. but that doesn't mean it was not readable. Try reading it you might like it, just like me. So I advise you to improve your writing and update again.

what kind of tense do you use?

interesting

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no comment?

yep focus on your self

when the flash back end try doing this I slowly opened my eyes as the memory began to fade away.

you should try doing something like this when you write a flashback btw I'm trying my best to use first person view so sorry I sat on the bench, looking at my friend which made me feel nostalgia. I closed my eyes as a pleasing memory flashed in my eyes. like that it's showing

I saw a lot of grammar mistakes but it's still readable a land the author can still edit it

to many AS