This is the first time since I use WebNovel that i read a writing that deserve a five star. Good use of punctuation, hidden gem beneath the pile of papers.

Alright! The story is good, I don't think the grammatical error is a big deal since the author isn't a native speaker. Keep doing what you are doing.

Quite interesting story tbh. maybe you should check it, or must check it! The writing is quite... good. Keep writing dude, hope people read this gem.

Remove the "ROAR".

This is supposed to be her. I try to do my best

you know, i did try to make this as an interactive story game (but i stopped). you actually can see the state of my mind.

Why are you laughing at such name? Insulting the native name from the people of china!? I swear i will crush you down if i ever see you. Don't ever laugh at china again!!

It's actually a good novel. Nice writing, some words probably need to be latinized. I don't know anything about chinese words, so it'll be helpful for you to write the latinized words too. Development is actually crazy. It went from 0-10 in a second. Some of her act is actually an offendable crime, which is quite funny and downer for me at the same time. 10/10 mindblowingly insane mc. she need help, get her to a nearby therapist/hospital for the insane.

Good book, lot of sexyyy. Write more, i love your book. Me, representing the country India love your literature, and the way you represented the story. However there could be something that you can fix, especially with the words..

I'm a 15 years old from India, and i love the story you made. My pp became hard when reading each of your paragraph. But sadly, the grammar, the comas need to be tidy. I cannot push out my com if you can't write it well. Please help me, I'm aroused, write it more better! 🇮🇳🇮🇳Love, from India 🇮🇳🇮🇳

Jehidas, has atrithis. From pelvis from wearing levis. Read this story, or you regret it. Miss the chapters, you'll get aspergers. This is a short poem, from a schizophrenic golem.

WARNING WARNING WARNING This a unique story including a 5 yo kid. A good to best kind of cultivation novel. If i can rate it 1 - 10, i would give it a good sandwich out of ten. Read it, but be careful not to have a stroke if you have diabetes.

wohooo

Just read the first chapter, good one. If the story is really not about cultivation i'm selling my soul today. Go Aiden, commit third degree murder!

Is the story coming from a first person perspective or third person? If it's first person then make first person, not mixed with third person perspective. Love, Dzeeck

need to add the word 'he'

Yo, Alexander is my dude. HOLY SHEEETTTT. Alexander prolly the true protagonist in this story. Remember, i'm biased. Read this, you need to read it before it got terminated!

It's horrible. Chapter one obviously need some upgrading, including the grammar and the way the story being written. It's plain, bland, nothing to be quite put as special. I'm suggesting you to read some real novel, and look how they are being written. If you are not a native english speaker, then try using some grammar website. Hopefully it will help you in the end.

typo. Strongest not strogest