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I liked the original version where he knew the events and was also always in control of the situation, like a slice of life, and there was no drama, plot twist or getting out of trouble. It's much better not to have this type of plot that seems to take a long time, and if you're going to do more than 3 worlds, you have to be careful not to have too many chapters or it will get boring, and people will want the mc to go to a new world soon.
The first fanfic was so good and I hope so much that you finish this one that, I really want to kind of put you on something like "mandatory" like starting a patreon for the fanfic, a lot of people don't like that of course but I think it's a good idea like having advanced chapters on patreon, and patreon is also something like "damn I have this much support. so I should continue and finish" there are so many fanfics that I see drop and it gets sad, then with patreon it will be the same as me for example I get when I played World of Warcraft that I paid for so I had to play. Other than that pls continue this fanfic.
I hope you make better advances on milim and ramiris this time, I know they are mentally acting like spoiled children but they are thousands of years old so there must be something to get them out of this and have a fun romance with them both and if you do the lust ability again please try to get valentine in the harem.
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Make him less cold, I know it's because of the unique ability but I didn't need this development, for an overpower character like Rimuru and as he has romance it could improve the interaction with the characters and please put milim, ramiris and luminous valentine in the harem .
I really think there shouldn't be too many plot twists or epic scenes, etc. The mc is at rank open Heaven Realm 9th in the past life, it's good to have progression and change his personality a little. But what I think would fit better is a slice of life like, following the story, making different choices than the yang kai and being easier obviously, what's more in martial peak is protagonist plot armor and wouldn't it be good to see that in a fanfic with an op character in a past life. So far it's been very good, but if it's slice of life it will be good. an example is Primogenitor in marvel which is a good slice of life fanfic with an op character, of course people were complaining about where it was going with the story only and with the future because it was straying too far from what would come in the future like movies, etc. to fit into the fanfic. But in fanfic you don't need to think about it that much because each "world" that yang kai goes to practically no one knows about him it's like tongxuan, Heng Luo Star Field and Star Boundary, we'll really like it if it continues, we need more martial peak fanfic. And I'm sorry about the English, I used google translate.
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