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Hello! Thank you for pointing out my mistakes! I went back and fixed the chapter making Adamas older then Poseidon. I do plan to keep Hera's age younger than Hades for reason's planned in the future, Apologies for not making this clear!
Wow a 5 star review from the author, what a surprise! Honest, so far with being 3 real chapters in at 5 more planned I think this fanfic so far is about 4. Mainly because of update stability as I have work and also taking summer classes for college so its a little iffy. Please note about the bee movie script, it is there purely for word count and will be removed once I pass 15k words written myself. I just want to know what you guys think and where I could improve in my writing
this deserves 5 stars just for the author following jojo stand themes of being named after a song......................................................
Writing Quality: Seems really good, doesn't seem to have any noticeable mistakes that will cause you to have to re-read it. Update Stability: updates seem to be frequent with enough time in-between them. It seems the author prepares 3 chapters and posts them 1 hour apart each. Story development: MHA where it seems like females are dominants over men, a common fanfic idea. Development seems to be going at a nice rate not going to fast or slow. Character Design: MC is a OC!Izuku where he has a terrible mother which causes him to have a lot of trust issues and built up emotion, hopefully we can see some improvement with the help of UA when the author get's there. World Background: MHA world where woman dominate over men, Men seem to be treated poorly while woman are cast upon a high pedestal. Some characters seem to be gender-bent such as Katsuki and All-Might (Maybe Endeavor to but I didn't seem an indication.). Personally I like this type of background because the character personality's for people beside Inko and Izuku doesn't seem to be changed to much which is nice I hope you enjoyed my review, definitely going to keep reading this if it continues nicely
I do very much like this but it is confusing to keep track of what's happening. i dont mind the OP MC and like how your telling his backstory on where he is today but when you make a flashback chapter every other chapter it gets really confusing to keep track of what's happening in the present time.
Writing Quality: Very Good, not sounding like a Chinese novel translated Update Stability: Seems very often with a good break in-between each update to ensure quality, very appreciated Story Development: a little to fast past but its fine as it's made up with the writing quality, story development is good and definitely has potential to be one of the better danmachi fics on webnovel Character Design: MC is a simp for hephaestus BUT he is a good simp. He's not over bearing or overly-possessive but is kind, compassionate and treats her as an equal. He is also confident but not overly so and knows when to stop. He is also very cautious of other gods and even informs hephaestus about Freya as Syr, he also knows not to be scammed by Loki. World Background: Danmachi a great world and has a lot of potential within it and i'm glad to see it being used
Writing Quality: Use Grammarly to fix it Update Stability: one of the only reasons this isn't 1 star Story Development: Way to fast paced, Luffy wanting to become a marine? Character Design: Mc takes over luffy's body AFTER he meets shanks and decides to become marine admiral, his was of speaking is terrible and only has 1-2 good moments World Background: the other reason this isn't 1 star, it's one piece
Oh please great Tobi-Sama, Please grant these mere mortal's with your tales. Even if we haven't deserved to hear such great tales I beg of thy to provide at least 1 more.
thank you for telling me what you thought. I never noticed that I had done this before as I was just going with the flow of my writing so i will definitely try and improve myself.
I love this so much. Not only is there a great story line so far but it keeps me wanting to come back for more. Jaune is OP for the world of remnant but I'm expecting he wont stay there permanently like when he went to Danmanchi. Jaune as a character as a good personality, isn't over confidant as he knows he isnt the strongest in the multiverse and he's not one of those harem protagonists that are just interested in a girls body like heck, the only one he love's so far is Scathach. If this turns into a harem with like 5-12 girls i'll probably rate it at a 4.5 just because of my personal preference but right now the story is perfect and I can't wait for more PS; I would give an extra .5 stars if i could for making aurther pendragon a male while training Jaune
Cant wait for the next chapter