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constantine171dPosted- constantine171dCommentedCh 40 Chiba's Various Techniques
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he is like me fr
Mei saw it in those enchanting blue pearls of his, he meant every word, he wanted Kiri and Konoha to coexist rather than cannibalize. What a cute man. - constantine172dCommented
maybe I am mistaken but like Hiruzen said: Danzo I am the hokage!" or in this case mizukage I cam understand that she is his advisor but should he really give her a reason? I mean she is demanding not asking
Lord Funato watched her leave in stark wide disbelief before snapping at me again, "Explain." - constantine172dReplied to Tim_Saian
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the irony
"Hellish Training System! I will tear apart the cheaters of the Shinobi world into pieces with it! I want to eventually consume them and not even notice! This is another goal I have for my life and to become a master and the best of them all!" - constantine172dPosted
the idea isn't bad, the writing is alright the story development is meh it isn't really interesting but at least the mc has taken the first step toward accepting who he is. though that idea of mc splitting himself from Yagura isn't something that I would do it seems like a bad plot. as for the romance it is meh. Firstly romance isn't fitted for anime like One Piece Dragon Ball naruto etc because that isn't the focus instead makes the story bad and distorts the flow. Also, you could go for a female character that already exists instead of making an oc these were all the reasons I gave the story development such a low rating. as for the character design, it is understandable you haven't described even once one character. That's all I had to say, if you want to know what could be done better that's easy. Continue writing and not only will you improve but you will learn from your mistakes through trial and error. that's why I gave it a 3 out of 5 I could be harsher with my words but that's not the point.
- constantine175dReplied to Ansura
no
"I'll go, meow." Takeshi waved his paw. Little Shota has grown up and has gradually turned into a sinister man, and it is not as easy to score points as before. Although Kabuto has become much more sinister, he is still a good boy with superb skills. - constantine175dReplied to ComTolManBoePyaJhu
no it was his vice captain
"Mission Two: Defeat three enemies with a bounty of 300 million within ten days! Current Progress: [1/3]" - constantine176dReplied to Platofox
nothing
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chief I think you mean 2024. 2044 is 2 decades ahead
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I think it makes the flow better but you d o you
Of course, if Uchiha Fugaku did have a kaleidoscope, that would be a different matter. - constantine177dCommented
just say mangekyo sharingan
Of course, if Uchiha Fugaku did have a kaleidoscope, that would be a different matter. - constantine177dCommented
talent matters also not everyone is teacher material plus she doesn't. matter
Speaking of marriage, last to exit the room, Rina approached me with a fierce and determined fire in her eyes. Her hands clutched the kunai that bore that god awful message, "Please, make me strong!" - constantine177dCommented
what does he mean by little ghost?
"Hey! Little ghost, has Chakra refining failed again? Field - constantine177dCommented
why hokage instead of naruto? also naruto is just fine no need to add ' world"
You must know how humble a civilian family is in the Hokage world, and they are cannon fodder in the war, and Amazawa Kiyotaki's parents died in the war. - constantine179dReplied to nablethenoble
Thanks
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then why did he lost?
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