i still think you should gradually get rid of the UI elements and redirect it to more explainable things .. no resource bars no list of which effects are influencing him. get rid of Questmarker, the magical notebook and the magical map. have him struggle to obtain map as replacement since detailed maps should be guarded as military assets by the various factions pretty fiercely. he can write so let him struggle to scribble his own journal

whose fertile woman does he intend to sacrifice for that and can he do it without that elven witch he collaborated with before?.. i guess if both Sofia and mrissi are indeed pregnant that would cover for a bit but somehow I doubt silvy is fine with them both dying during labour

fights like a true warrior when he hid and threw magic around? dude...

exactly. Skyrim is the country rorikstead the village and whiterun hold is the neighborhood. whiterun got 1 city 2 villages and some bandit infested keeps/towers/ruins

the overall story is good, world building is progressing along just fine if necessary and increasing as the story progresses as it's in Skyrim not much of that needed at first. nice transition over time from game to reality even if I might have wished for a more slap in the face approach. there are 2 additional passives that are especially annoying but they did not majorly Impact the story so far so it's all good. here and there are some small errors about different in story things but they can be easily ignored and nothing world breaking. the writing itself is good, far better than a lot of fanfiction I've read so far and only small typos Frome time to time... poor Maurice *salutes*major flaw tho, it's way too short. with the ongoing pace I could've easily enjoyed reading a few hundred chapter more and yet it's over after just a little bit of time. other than that, I can only recommend this story!

Sofia makes sense maybe .. I'm not sure how compatible men and mer are, but kitty is a different species so it should not work out in theory... and wasn't it just a few days that they got hot n heavy? like 2-3 weeks at most for kitty and just a few days for the drunkard...

just pointed out the scientific flaws since you wrote it's colder at night .. that implements it's warmer during the day*shrug*

dude water stays warm way longer during the night than the air .. if the river is warm during the day, it's also warm at night. arguable if the river is warm at all though since flowing water is tricky.anyway he should get shocked by the cold air once he gets out instead

so... he gonna sacrifice women who just gave birth there too?

yeah that and that the high elf and roriks trusted friend are sacrificing fertile women to better their harvests ...

his bounty is actually in the whole hold of Whiterun tho ... could have gotten arrested there x times over

not that I want him to suffer, but it would be hilarious if someone breaks in from the window (like a thief on the getaway for example) after all his precautions 👀

why do you change the name of Maurice each time? is this supposed to be a running gag? cuz it would be funnier he it's not from the narrator but a character ..

well she is a feline so...

don't let him save the traitor please 👀

why are these two hard to build ? the only reason I ever struggle with them is because I reset them over and over and that's without the exploit

sarcasm is this thing were you write down how much thirst you got for a beer but hide it behind different words right?🫣

mmh seems plausible .. makes me wonder if i ever actually went to solstheim ahead of time, at least i can't remember. Wich is why I wrote what i did 🤔

yeah that's dumb .. better force it on brynjolf since he will do the actual guild master stuff anyway and better get someone else to be the listener too .. someone expandable who can afford to spend most of his time with mommy corpse to give out targets to whoever is left of the brotherhood