Good story quality, Interesting story development to continue following, character design is quite classic, but good! world background like the previous novel, but worth following, overall average can be described as a very good and interesting novel!

Wooooooow

Good!

The story's intonation is much better, the plot is not too rushed, the dialogue is quite good, but the punctuation is very, very poor. This is how it should be if you use a question mark. Do not add a period. That is very wrong. "!." is very foolish and incorrect. Just use "!" or "." separately. For example, "Hey Luffy! How are you!" Okay, just use the exclamation mark. Do not add it with a period. Also, do not add the combination of "!?" too frequently and continuously. It is very inefficient and uncomfortable. Just use "!" or "?" alone.

There are several writing errors, inappropriate punctuation, somewhat strange descriptions, a rushed storyline, lack of good story intonation, it can be said to be very lacking. Can it be read? Yes, that's all. Thank you.

There are several writing errors, inappropriate punctuation, somewhat strange descriptions, a rushed storyline, lack of good story intonation, it can be said to be very lacking. Can it be read? Yes, that's all. Thank you.

What? Turns out of us one religion, are you also Muslims? Don't you even Indonesian?

Selamat hari raya idul Fitri author!

Cool

author, are you sharing your experiences?

For some reason I don't like novels like this, where the mc takes the body of the original character, I prefer novels where the characters are made by the author himself.

Cap cip cup 🤣

Hem......

Akame ga kill

What! I can't believe this, I thought I was wrong before, but this turned out to be true, you took the reference from Otome Game Sekai wa Mob ni Kibishii Sekai Desu, from his world, mc background, from mc being sold, then about him finding the robot like a ball , even mc's fight with the prince, even though Alice is not engaged to the prince, but there are some things in common, even now that Alice, transferred to the territory of mc is also the same, even though in this novel the mc does not know that he is in the otome game, and the one who knows it is erselice... I don't know what her name is, anyway she knows that the world is a game, really the storyline of this novel is too fast, the conflict is too fast, if you want to make a novel, and take references from other people's novels, at least try not to be too similar, it's too similar, in the beginning, if you ask me, that's all, hopefully the novel will be better.

What! I can't believe this, I thought I was wrong before, but this turned out to be true, you took the reference from Otome Game Sekai wa Mob ni Kibishii Sekai Desu, from his world, mc background, from mc being sold, then about him finding the robot like a ball , even mc's fight with the prince, even though Alice is not engaged to the prince, but there are some things in common, even now that Alice, transferred to the territory of mc is also the same, even though in this novel the mc does not know that he is in the otome game, and the one who knows it is erselice... I don't know what her name is, anyway she knows that the world is a game, really the storyline of this novel is too fast, the conflict is too fast, if you want to make a novel, and take references from other people's novels, at least try not to be too similar, it's too similar, in the beginning, if you ask me, that's all, hopefully the novel will be better.

writer, I'd rather you write a story like a romcom, because if it's a shojo, let's just say I don't like the main female characters, but if you can really make this story good, and not half-hearted like some of your novels, then I will definitely read it.

really great, really cool, really amazing, great, continue the author's chapter, I'm waiting for the continuation.

The author, thank you for the chapter, I hope you are more frequent updated, because I really like your story.