Hello! Can you review my novel again? I would appreciate it if you can

Please enjoy! Leave your thoughts and feedback in the comments! I appreciate each and every word! I love hearing from readers :)

English is not my first language so I'm sorry in advance if there's something wrong and don't be shy to correct me:)

English is not my first language so I'm sorry in advance if there's something wrong with it so don't be shy to correct me