Ok if I see anything wrong I Will chip in and try to help

what kind of name is that reminded me of my deep fried chicked fries dipped in my chilly heavenly solar meat ball sauce

So This is pretty good but it has a few problem the grammer is weird at some point same for the conjugaison is hella weird sometimes too . English is probaly not the first language of the author so i dont blame him that mutch i hope he trys to correct his mistake . Apart from this the story is good and has potential just repeating my self i really hope he corrects his mistake so bye

it crusade time mother floppe !!!

is he going to rebel aganest his creator the author

what a noob in your next next life use incognito and vpn to fool you FBI agent or whatever agent looks after you

why did this turn into a jojo battle all of a sudden

killer queen touched this individual he is dead

i will glady use this if i become a trap