Great intro. I got a good feel for what was lost. I learned a little about our main character, and I have a ton of questions. Good job

I’m not sure, but I think a comma is needed

I like that Ren is helping Kara. Ren seems like she could use her powers for evil. I’m glad she is doing some good

This is making me hungry!

Room is there after bedroom

Small typo. *minutes

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This is someone who knows how to write. The pacing is spot on. Thier main character is so charismatic you can’t help but to fall in love with her. If you enjoy this genre, this is a must.

Action and cool characters are clearly the best part here. Can’t wait to see what happens next. Some typos but those can be fixed. If you like cool people doing cool stuff check this out