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@Author. Can you not drag too much...... 8-9 chapters for just a fight... I can clearly feel that the story is being dragged too much... please don't do this to your readers. people will abandon this novel because of boredom, if this continue.. I am starting to feel, whether its worth or not now. I am sure others are too..
I dont know. The storyhas potential. MC being lazy is also good. But is too lazy... Gaining strength he dont deserve is also frustrating. I can understand MC being afraid of betrayal again, and want a peaceful life. But stroies like this where strong preys on weak. MC needs to be a little more serious. I dont understand. He was the strongest person in his previous life. But he easily falls to betrayal, and breaks down. Almost like he becomes strongest without going through any hardships or betrayal. MC is dump to not know in such world, he needs strength to live peaceful life, but considering his system makes him stronger without him doing any effort, i dont know. The whole story seems stupid to me. The story has potential, but ruined it. Dropping this... I kind of like hardworking MC, who is proud of his hard earned strength.
mc is too naive. Anyone, who has basic intelligence wont be this rash. he put all his cards on table without even any second thoughts. I dont understand. Is all characters in this world void of jealousy. But that impossible right?. If he put all his cards, there is no cards for him to play in emergency situations. And the story is too much fast paced. MC is really too naive.... But considering this is your first story, you can improve it. Best of luck. I hope the pace slows down later.