Keiran_Fallon
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Keiran_Fallon8mthCommentedclearly vs. "cleary".
Now all the others could see the symbol that was drawn quite cleary. It was a round large eye, with bat like wings. It was a symbol that Quinn had come to know and had seen a few times.- Keiran_Fallon8mthCommented
nodded vs. "nooded".
Jared nooded thinking it was a strange question to ask out of the blue, but he showed Quinn he was able to. - Keiran_Fallon1yrCommented
*you're* embarrassing, not *your*.
"Stop it, dad, your embarrassing me," Abby said. "And it was all thanks to Minny. She thought about the beast that was in the hallway so we could all get away." - Keiran_Fallon1yrCommented
Weak blonde guy my aunt petunia! I'm reminded of whe Vegeta's power monocle read Goku's power level It's over 9,000!" comes to mind![img=recommend]
"We lack crystals for this trip. So we must get as much as we can. And the solution is in front of us. Go split the two up and get the crystals from the weak blonde guy. I trust that you know what to do." The captain ordered. - Keiran_Fallon1yrReplied to Blackfut
She's a sub-class which, I guess for Dhampirs, is close enough to count.
"Both of you will fight me together? That will be better because it will only make me stronger!" Erin said with her eyes glowing an even brighter yellow. The dhampir energy instantly covered her entire body, and her hair began to fly back on its ends. - Keiran_Fallon2yrCommentedCh 1616 Bring the Whole Army!
- Keiran_Fallon2yrCommentedCh 1616 Bring the Whole Army!
- Keiran_Fallon2yrCommentedCh 1580 Finding Everyone
- Keiran_Fallon2yrReplied to readingaddict89
No hate. I like the story, but the spelling errors happen far too often. I think having an someone to proof read before hand might help. I really wanna see where this story goes!
"Wait just you two alone, don;t you need my help. What if there;s someone reallys torng the two of you can;t handle. Do you expect me to just stay here!" Fex started to shout at the railing. The ones close by were looking at him as if he had gone mad, since they were unable to see the spider. Even if they could, they would have thought he had gone crazy. - Keiran_Fallon2yrCommented
exiting, not exciting
All of them cheered in the room at that moment. They stood up from their seats, ready to move out. Seconds later, and nearly everyone on the Pure Sub started to move. Entering teleporters, some exciting from small pods in the submarine out in the water. - Keiran_Fallon2yrCommented
remaining not reminding
Since Quinn realised that the reminding crystal wouldn't evolve Vorden to the next stage again, they decided to use the rest on Raten. If they didn't, they could just see Raten complaining the whole way. - Keiran_Fallon2yrCommented
"Their" not "There".
'There fighting techniques are evolving as I use them more and more. They are no longer just a normal one spiked Dalki. I wonder if this information is permanent or if they die, they have to learn the skills all over again as I get a new Marked?' Quinn thought. - Keiran_Fallon2yrCommented
Should be "...you're back"
"Samantha, Samantha, your back! We have urgent news. There's been a strong reading of a Dalki that has just landed. It's possibly one of the leaders you asked for!" A man with glasses at the gate yelled. - Keiran_Fallon2yrCommentedCh 1164 Undying Mech
- Keiran_Fallon2yrCommented
"sight" not "site".
"Not all of us are the same." Logan replied, ready to defend himself at any moment. It still hadn't attacked him, so he didn't want to do anything to make it. "There are beasts in nature who attack us on site." - Keiran_Fallon2yrReplied to ThePeanutGuru
I think he meant "strong". Paying attention to spelling and punctuation aren't his strong suite.
"Wait just you two alone, don;t you need my help. What if there;s someone reallys torng the two of you can;t handle. Do you expect me to just stay here!" Fex started to shout at the railing. The ones close by were looking at him as if he had gone mad, since they were unable to see the spider. Even if they could, they would have thought he had gone crazy. - Keiran_Fallon2yrCommented
Use commas not semicolons.
"Wait just you two alone, don;t you need my help. What if there;s someone reallys torng the two of you can;t handle. Do you expect me to just stay here!" Fex started to shout at the railing. The ones close by were looking at him as if he had gone mad, since they were unable to see the spider. Even if they could, they would have thought he had gone crazy. - Keiran_Fallon2yrCommented
opponent not opener
"Negative, Sir. One of the Cursed faction members has been complaining about the performance of one of our pilots, so we invited him out to the field to teach him a lesson. Due to the disrespect that was being shown we requested Avion to show off the difference between both our factions! As expected he defeated his opener swiftly!" - Keiran_Fallon2yrCommented
"peek" not "peak".
Taking a peak around the corner, for a split second Fex could see his opponent firing his way. He pulled back his head, but naturally, he hadn't accounted for the delay yet, so the energy blast sent his giant robot flying through the air.