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DaoistKUnJPZ2mthPostedAs the one of authors of the book, we are not expecting much traction for the book as this is our first book. And considering our slow updates, it's expected to not get much traction, however i thank any and all who are reading the book. The story itself is made ftom a game we've played in and its a bit convuluted and may be confusing sometimes. If you have any questions, please dont hesitate to ask. Also a bit if a shameless author review hehehe
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Are ykh nah i'd win because with this treasure I summon with his overwhelming intensity , or are you the honored one because stand proud the one who left it all behind and you are strong
He then said with a straight face. "Nah, I'd win!" - DaoistKUnJPZ4mthCommented
Does anyone else see the <nulli><nullb> things
ARE NOT ALLOWED THEIR OWN BROOMSTICK - DaoistKUnJPZ5mthReplied to Alastor_The_SCP
He needs to wipe out all life either way to go back home, he's just using the OG Thanos's reasons to hide that he's not the OG Thanos from the Acient One
"This Universe is finite; Its resources finite. And if life is left unchecked life will cease to exist. It will end itself." He said and the Ancient One was absolutely baffled with what he was saying. - DaoistKUnJPZ5mthReplied to NappySaiyan
It was a one time activation man
Facing this confrontation had me quaking in my boots, for sure. - DaoistKUnJPZ5mthReplied to NappySaiyan
It was a one time
"Calm down, calm down, calm down," I repeated to myself, focusing on regulating my breathing as I felt my temper rising. I needed to manage my blood pressure; otherwise, I might end up keeling over before even fully utilizing my system's potential. - DaoistKUnJPZ8mthReplied to noobmaster36068493
The Blackest Night falls from the skies, The darkness grows as all light dies, We crave your hearts and your demise, By my black hand, the dead shall rise!
Form: Lantern (Preform) - DaoistKUnJPZ8mthCommented
What?
He was immediately met my Annie have a mental breakdown in front of Eve and Kevin. - DaoistKUnJPZ9mthReplied to Vaulted_Hood32
There is an actual Kluh in marvel Canon
"Kluh, as your strength defines you," I said, naming the former green, now black, giant. As I also like to have my own black Hulk. - DaoistKUnJPZ10mthReplied to Knight7863He always liked this character who doesn't have much of an effect on the plot in the anime, but whose popularity surpasses that of the female lead by countless times.
- DaoistKUnJPZ10mthReplied to DrkDragin
Sad and depressing
Yusuke analyzed, 'I guess they're asking because my dad's one of their coworkers and not because they're actually interested. Sadge.' - DaoistKUnJPZ1yrCommented
To 3.3%
[The proficiency of your skill 'strengthening of the senses' has increased. 3,3%.] - DaoistKUnJPZ1yrCommented
LOOKING AT YOU ROSE
"Fine, you didn't need to say your ability and I give you praise for not telling us the moment I ask, you should not just blatantly say your ability, especially to strangers, only idiots do those," She said and Errol couldn't help but think that she just insulted most of the character in other verses including this one. - DaoistKUnJPZ1yrReplied to Sir_Squirrel
He's asking for the date
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- DaoistKUnJPZ1yrReplied to Champsing
Okay since you asked let's go to the mc, I get you want to make an evil character but I feel like you should flesh out his personality more and his goals. Instead of making him stay one paced on a single thing you could make him learn from evil yet somewhat naive to evil and cunning and the other characters in my opinion they feel like cardboard(Please note I'm not trying to call this story bad or offend you.) They feel as if... They go along the whims of the mc and his merchant friend for him I guess I feel as if his actions feel a little bit too forced? Him and the mc everything looks a little bit too forced
If even 5 people comment on here I will immediately start reworking on this book. - DaoistKUnJPZ1yrReplied to Nogitsune96
Sauce i feel like I've watched this before
" Let's get this done. I don't have fire but I have Ki, a tame amount should be enough to at least barbecue it. " - DaoistKUnJPZ1yrReplied to DaoistKUnJPZ
I may have written the last thing wrong
If even 5 people comment on here I will immediately start reworking on this book. - DaoistKUnJPZ1yrCommented
In my opinion and I don't mean this badly, the grammar and sentence structures need to be fixed. Sometimes you switch his and her which although small still needs to be fixed. Again I don't mean this badly but you could either get an editor or use grammaly
If even 5 people comment on here I will immediately start reworking on this book. - DaoistKUnJPZ1yrReplied to legendary_awesome
Thanks
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