In the end, only one girl will be chosen. But along the way, it's anyone's game. I still haven't completely settled on how things will end.

The story has a decent balance of different elements. It does well in showing that its MC is a world-weary man, while preserving the mystery of his experience. Each setting is well crafted to paint a good mental picture. And the way it's written, the character's inner turmoil can be clearly felt. The pacing is relaxed, but nothing to complain about. Only gripe is that some of the MC's self loathing inner monologue seems to be rather heavy handed and melodramatic. Aside from that, I think this is shaping up to be a good read.

A cyclops is a monster from Greek mythology. Physically, it's similar to a human, except for the fact that not only is it a giant, but it has just one eye in the middle of its head.

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Needs a comma after 'Dear'

Just the one. However, we are copious amounts of chapters away from a definite conclusion. And by the time we get to that point, I hope that the one who gets chosen will not only make sense but be mostly agreed upon that she's the best choice.

Geez, what did I do to inspire that gif?

Could probably drop 'It's useless" with the past sentence

And you can't smell your own s**t on your knees

Should be 'bloodied clothes'

I think the word should be "followed" not "flowed"

Sorry about that. I just figured out that by changing my genre to female leading, it would be classified as romance, which this is.

It doesn't taste fantastic on its own, but it really adds a lot of flavor when added to soup broth.

You do very well in describing your world and characters. The imagery you create just makes them seem so real. Just be sure to check your spelling and capitalization and break up your paragraphs when you have dialog. Otherwise, this story shows much promise.

Should be 'practice'

That should be "Oh, how I pity you, my friend. So tell me more. I'm interested in hearing."

Could probably say "As you can see there is much I don't understand"

Could probably lose 'if you think I intend to disrespect you by lying.'

Should be 'those two' and add a question mark

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