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Ryan: Masked… What are you part of?- ImNotaChainUser2yrCommented
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Quintin placed his hands on Lorisian's helmet to push back as much as he could. Lorisian released his grasp which dropped Quintin to the ground. Doctor A hid her mouth behind her fist as she tried her best not to break out into laughter. - ImNotaChainUser2yrCommented
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Thong's eyes twitched, Gerald noticed a subtle change of color before a fist went flying past his face. He stumbled back as Thong pushed himself back up with his fists clenched, his breathing heavy. He charged forward, Gerald preparing a grab before noticing the way Thong charged at him. - ImNotaChainUser2yrCommented
I love these names lol
Warrick: He has no need to mention his reasons for fighting or starting a new tournament. What matters is that he brought us all together here. Even world leaders like American President Bipen, Russian President Prubin, as well as many others I'd find hard to name at my age. - ImNotaChainUser2yrCommented
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Golden lights filled the night sky, the several buildings that surrounded the main ring looking like world wonders. Audience members and fighters alike interacted at every corner, but the one building that looked the most welcoming was the dining hall. The dining hall was grand, seeming to come directly out from a movie. Further back into the building was another large room where the most powerful people in the world sat. The doors opened on both ends of the room. One side had Daymond and Shizu enter with Dianshi closing the door behind them. The other side revealed Theodore and Theresa in mesmerizing suits, ones fit for a king and queen. They both took their seats at the opposite sides of the long table, the seats filled with world leaders and the heads of massive corporations. The first to stand up was a studious-looking man with glasses and a clean black suit. The CEO of the Micron Technology company, Darsh Nadella. - ImNotaChainUser2yrCommentedCh 110 Chapter 109 - Special Guests
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Nice character addition you made here lol
Cero opened his eyes, looking down at the woman who was now on her knees. She kept moving her head up, and down profusely; moving so quickly that it seemed like she was about to throw her head off her body. Despite her fall and constant head shaking, her glasses stayed on with only being a bit crooked. - ImNotaChainUser2yrCommented
You really go into grisly detail. I almost felt it while I was reading
Theodore and Carrie returned to Xavier's office, watching Xavier pan over the multiple x-rays while the other paramedics attempted to stabilize Abraham. His helmet was taken off with some of the broken parts of the metal mask piercing into his skin, his face was bloody and hardly recognizable. One paramedic carefully removed the metals with tweezers as Theodore's face grew grim, seeing the scars from when he first met Abraham. - ImNotaChainUser2yrCommentedCh 109 Chapter 108 - His Favorite Character
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Theodore and Carrie returned to Xavier's office, watching Xavier pan over the multiple x-rays while the other paramedics attempted to stabilize Abraham. His helmet was taken off with some of the broken parts of the metal mask piercing into his skin, his face was bloody and hardly recognizable. One paramedic carefully removed the metals with tweezers as Theodore's face grew grim, seeing the scars from when he first met Abraham. - ImNotaChainUser2yrCommented
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At a speed faster than Gary could go limp, Gonzalez struck Gary from the chest up to the face. Each strike landed at a vital point, sending shock waves all over Gary's body. Clenching his entire fist, Gonzalez slammed it into Gary's face, bending the serial killer backward and slamming the back of his head into the ground. Gonzalez pulled back his fist, stumbling back before sitting down. Sweat covered his body, an exhaustion he had never felt before overcame him. Everyone was left in silence as the ring was unmoving. Indica fell to his knees with his eyes wide open. Zachary stood back up from having hidden under the desk with the referee and Zenzo. He grabbed the mic, and a feeling of unmatched joy filled his heart. - ImNotaChainUser2yrCommented
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Gary's right arm shot up, Gonzalez leaning back as the arm slashed his left pec and part of his cheek. Blood flew into the air, Gary looking back up to see the fear in Gonzalez's eye. But the look was never there. All that stared him back was a look of annoyance, anger, and murderous intent. - ImNotaChainUser2yrCommented
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Gary was unable to respond, his arm no longer attacking. Gary's head began to droop as his body slowly returned to normal. Gonzalez's body tensed up as Gary's left foot quickly rotated, causing a massive crack below the both of them, throwing Gonzalez off balance. - ImNotaChainUser2yrCommented
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Gonzalez's eyes darted all around himself, avoiding attacks no one else would be capable of seeing. By following each of Gary's movements, the sounds of the air, the impacts of the ground, everything that Gary did just gave Gonzalez what he needed to know. He threw a fist outward, Gary throwing his arm out to attack. Gonzalez waited for just the right moment, grabbing onto Gary's arm and yanking him back down to the ground. Yet Gary prepared for this. Slamming his feet into the ground and throwing a high-speed right strike to Gonzalez's head, who barely dodged the attack by slightly tilting his head. The strike arched back around to hit Gonzalez's back, but Gonzalez struck Gary's neck with a swift blow. Gary noticed how much harder it had become to breathe, but the strength within his body was welling up and he refused to stop. - ImNotaChainUser2yrCommented
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Gary's entire body felt as if it was about to burst. He had never felt such excitement and joy like this before today. To him, everyone was prey, everyone was to feel fear and despair before him. Yet Gonzalez stood here, stoic and very much still alive. - ImNotaChainUser2yrCommented
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Gary's right arm shot into the air once more before striking down at Gonzalez. Gonzalez gritted his teeth before turning under Gary's arm. He could feel Gary's stretched out fingers twist in the stab wound, but he refused to let that stop him. Moving just barely out of the way of the strike, another spiral formed under Gonzalez, but his conviction refused to release Gary's arm. With all his strength, Gonzalez pulled down on Gary's arm, slamming the serial killer on his head on the ground floor. Gary's arm flew out of Gonzalez's stab wound, blood following it. Gonzalez stumbled back, falling to one knee as he watched blood ooze from around Gary's head. - ImNotaChainUser2yrCommented
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Gonzalez wrapped his hand around Gary's arm, Gary feeling his death grip. Gonzalez then grabbed further onto Gary's arm with his left, and with all his might, he pulled Gary's arm into the air. Gary was left meters in the air, looking down at Gonzalez. The beautiful glow of his eyes were unlike anything Gary had ever seen. - ImNotaChainUser2yrCommented
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Gary slammed his hand into the ring wall before dragging it through, his arm getting wider and wider as a crevice was left in the wall. He yanked his arm out, sending a large amount of debris flying at Gonzalez. Gonzalez quickly knocked each flying piece of concrete away, noticing Gary stretch his legs far to move quickly around the ring. His movements were like a puppet on a string, entirely unnatural. Nothing about Gary could be classified as human. Gary shot out his right arm, his sights directed at Gonzalez's head. Gonzalez ducked out of the way and struck underneath the arm. A sharp pain filled Gonzalez's side. He looked down, noticing Gary's left arm had stabbed him.