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Thats grenades, not RPGs
A good story and premise that is ruined by the author's hornyness and need to sexualize 13-year-old girls every time one shows up.........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Sorry I'm "to much a trash", whatever that means.
You: "Not throwing accusations..." Also You: *Proceeds to throw out an exact percentage of a baseless accusation* If you don't like the story or (from what it sounds like) don't like me using big words, then just say that instead of trying to paint my novel as something it's not.
Started out really cool and had a good premise, but the story is ruined by the Authors's inability to take his own social points and views out and just tell a good story. The world he's created is one where the societal elements feel forced and overbearing, overshadowing any potential for a captivating narrative. It's as if the author's main goal was to push his personal beliefs onto the reader, rather than allowing them to form their own opinions and interpretations. Furthermore, the characters lack depth and seem like mere vessels for the author's ideologies rather than fully fleshed-out individuals with their own motivations and struggles. They often come across as one-dimensional and predictable, making it difficult to truly connect with their journeys. As the story progresses, it becomes increasingly evident that the plot takes a backseat to the author's relentless desire to convey their social points and views. This single-minded approach detracts from the overall experience, leaving the reader feeling like they've been bombarded with a heavy-handed agenda rather than being taken on an immersive and engaging adventure. What could have been an intriguing and thought-provoking tale ultimately falls flat due to the author's inability to strike a balance between storytelling and preaching. A good story should be able to stand on its own merits without being burdened by an excessive push for particular social viewpoints. In conclusion, while the premise of the book showed promise, the author's inability to separate their personal agenda from the storytelling process ultimately led to a disappointing read. It's essential for writers to respect their audience and allow them the space to explore and form their own opinions. Unfortunately, in this case, the author's self-indulgence hindered the potential success of what could have been a compelling and enjoyable book.