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Player0Kun2dReplied to FeeblingCh 36 The Ancient One- Player0Kun8dPosted
This could have been better. Everything is happening at a very fast pace. Everyone is accepting things that john is bringing very easily like how Catlin accepted John wrag ability, she is worshiper of sven meaning anything that is magic is devil's work. Also she will never believe johns excuse for Peter 'little finger', and she will react negatively to johns heritage and will spill it's truth to her friend through letters, which will also be intercepted by master of whispers. She will view john more threat then ever because he is a danger to her family because he is connected to targerians and how Edward has kept it a secret from king. I also don't like how author made john summon Diana or wonder woman and meke her marmount, how can he explain her superpowers to world if she is a twin sister to a Normal girl, also why name Catwoman surname 'snow' it is givento batard and he also has not used any character card to change her background and just told her to say that she is her childhood friend, one that stark family has never meet.
- Player0Kun10dReplied to Player0Kun
He is not mourning or crying. Seems unrealistic
A small vehicle awaits outside, symbolising the transition from one chapter to the next. The matron gestures for me to take a seat, and with a reassuring smile, she takes her place beside me. The vehicle sets in motion, navigating the streets with a gentle rhythm. - Player0Kun10dCommented
I don't get it, there is no rites for there parents, he is not loss for them and what about the house that he used to live in with his parents, even if they are sending him orphanage there has to be some paperwork going on and some sort of notice that says that he is going to a orphanage and he should pack things from house and what is going to happen to it.
A small vehicle awaits outside, symbolising the transition from one chapter to the next. The matron gestures for me to take a seat, and with a reassuring smile, she takes her place beside me. The vehicle sets in motion, navigating the streets with a gentle rhythm. - Player0Kun17dCommentedCh 5 Chapter 5
- Player0Kun3mthCommented
is this based on marvel or mcu
Setting up his new abode, Adam sensed the dwindling magic even within the cave. "The raw magic in this cave is also dwindling, so I better hurry up and create those two spells," he resolved. His mind harbored two spell models, a ray of hope amid the encroaching gloom. After arranging his belongings and shedding the peculiar armor—untested against magic—Adam pondered the unfolding crisis. "Will this be the end of this world's magic?" he questioned himself, anticipating the intervention of powerful sorcerers like the Scarlet Witch. Doubt gnawed at him, despite them being powerful and saving its world magic, magic couldn't bring himself to rely on others. "Well, like I thought, I can only rely on myself," he sighed, settling into meditation. - Player0Kun3mthCommented
what date and time period is he in
Setting up his new abode, Adam sensed the dwindling magic even within the cave. "The raw magic in this cave is also dwindling, so I better hurry up and create those two spells," he resolved. His mind harbored two spell models, a ray of hope amid the encroaching gloom. After arranging his belongings and shedding the peculiar armor—untested against magic—Adam pondered the unfolding crisis. "Will this be the end of this world's magic?" he questioned himself, anticipating the intervention of powerful sorcerers like the Scarlet Witch. Doubt gnawed at him, despite them being powerful and saving its world magic, magic couldn't bring himself to rely on others. "Well, like I thought, I can only rely on myself," he sighed, settling into meditation. - Player0Kun3mthCommentedCh 4 Earning money and wrong target (chapter 4)
- Player0Kun3mthCommentedCh 2 creating the first spell(kind of) (chapter 2)
- Player0Kun3mthCommented
machine sprit
I took out a spare spirit stone and looked at the pile of broken electronic equipment in the corner. - Player0Kun4mthReplied to _Harsh_
i think what this mean is that, his soul is immortal meaning he will be reborn but that he cannot control or tell. But by doing this he became like Voldemort something after dying able to comeback in same universe by taking over a body or getting reborn in same universe.
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I think he can make itself ageless at least. You see, bending in avatar is basically a low level application of energy bending, all he have to d is unlock this skill and with enough medical and biological knowledge he can achieve that, if not then he can make him self something like night king but better. He can also get fire and water bending if he is able to master energy bending, can was able to back track how this technique is being applied to air and earth to actually able to get a modified or enhanced version of blood bending that can be taken to extreme and made flesh bending or biological bending.
*7 years later.* - Player0Kun4mthCommentedCh 6 Chapter-6: Hogwarts-2
- Player0Kun5mthCommented
How did he arrived?By cab, bus or what.Since he have already put on his robes, then does no muggles question him?
I arrived at the kings cross station half an hour early and found myself a trolley and put my boot on it, found myself in platform 9¾. I looked at the wall in front of me, and I walked through the wall and arrived at the other side of the wall. The railway station was exactly as it was described. - Player0Kun6mthCommented
mind hopping
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MC is dumb. I mean how can he just go to a blacksmith shop in NY and just handover vibranium and adamantium, be like make a sword for me. Does he even know how to use them? Does he know how to fight? What about that McDonald's fight in which he used is power in open, without mask and is roaming streets of NY like nothing happened.
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