Vaibhav_Mehra
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I like this system
I must say, this is the fastest reply from an author I've ever seen, and having you say that is reassuring
Should've been 'he "didn't" know' instead of 'he "doesn't" know' Pretty nice so far, other than these small grammatical issues with the narration
But whatever you choose to do, it's gotta be consistent This one is 'mostly' in the past, then all of a sudden there's 2 paragraphs narrated in present That's the source of the jarring read
How much did they sell for exactly? 1,500,000 Pesos (1.5 mil) or 1,500,000 Pesos (I don't even know how much that is)
Hmm, that's actually pretty much up to how the author wants to portray it, but having the narration in the past tense is the mainstream way Even this novel, for most of the part keeps the narration in past, for example: "I am very impressed by what you have presented, Michael" Bridget said That's an example, not actual text from the novel, just something I made up, but it suffices for explaining purposes The narration, which in this example would be: "Bridget said" is in the past, while the dialog, which would be: "I am very impressed by what you have presented, Michael" is in the present That's because most novels, including this one, tell a story that has already taken place, so to say While it would not be wrong to have the entire narration in present tense, trust me, it feels pretty jarring to read
My dear author, you need to brush up the grammar a bit, make all the narration in the past tense instead of present, for example, in this paragraph, instead of "There are core sciences he needed to level up", the correct way of putting it would be: "There 'were' core sciences he needed to level up" Other than that, it's a pretty neat work with a novel concept