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Who is it that the mc will be brought to another world with him? i really wish it wasn't Saya the infuriating Tsundere (only mentally challenged and M people like Tsundere). Saeko would be a perfect candidate, she isn't useless and can fight, but the other girl can only be a stress relief for the mc lol.
i expected as much, I've been reading your work since the mangaka and chat group, all the way till this one, most of your work is focused on slice of life and harem, there's action but it wasnt much too, so I guessed JJK might be a little too hard, just like you said, the woman in JJK world first priority isnt love so that will be quite hard to explore, and if you somehow managed to make it work, some people will be dissatisfied with the change of their favourite characters behaviour, compared to this, Danmachi might be the easiest to write, the world is suitable for harem as the og also a harem so it wont be a hassle to make it work i suppose and one piece? while the genre isn't harem, romance still exists there, so it can work with a bit of hassle, but how far are you going to the one piece arc if you're going to do it? all the way to the latest manga with a break in between ? so i guess you will do danmachi next with 70% certainty and one piece with 30 % certainty. Well just write what you want, as long as it flows smoothly, and not forced, it will be an entertaining read. Thanks for replying though.
Did you perhaps forget this fanfic has multiverse travelling as a theme in it? Akikan eveb considering to let the mc travel to either JJK that have cursed energy which is essentially mana that comes from negative energy, and a fuel to use "magic" or rather cursed techniques, and there is also Danmachi that revolves around falna that let you level up and learn skill, physical and supernatural, like "magic" and last but note least, there is One Piece that have Devil Fruit, that let you to use limited "magic" based on what "story"(?) the fruit have. Given the multiverse theme of this fanfiction, magic or other supernatural power that isnt physical becomes essential (there could be a skill that restrict physical thing and only magic allowed, and vice versa, this is why more source of power cant be bad, well perhaps other than overburden his body, but he is the mc, the probability of that happening is small) for traversing various worlds, aiding survival. Furthermore, have you read Akikan's dimensional chat group fanfiction? (While I'm unsure of Akikan's plans, there's a possibility of zombies undergoing mutations for upscaling purposes so it wasn't too easy for the mc. It's conceivable that zombies could eventually learn physical skill and perhaps even magic if the author wants it, or perhaps none at all If mutations don't occur) it could resemble that story. Even though the mc main world lacks supernatural elements, he still possesses magic and other powers to ease his quest completion and protect his loved one throughout the multiverse.
Tapi kyknya agak kurang dah kalau jjk dengan cara kau menulis, thor, yang penting menurut ku di JJK it momen brainrot nya, saking brainrot nya bukannya cringe malah tambah lucu ceritanya, dan juga dari buku buku yang pernah kau tulis, semua female lead nya gampang banget jatuh cinta dama mc, kalau female lead di JJK juga sama nggak lucu dan nggak seru jadinya, kayak Alternate Universe jadinya personality nya gak sama kyk original, which is a turn off for me. Well either way, its between danmachi or OP then, hopefully you can make the character as close as possible with the og and not make them easily fall in love with your mc, anyway good luck.
not yet in this ff at least, WB still alive and dandy
jjk is better, the power scaling isnt too big, danmachi is boring and one piece is too vast, i bet it would be too long for the arc to be done, maybe at the end? also jjk for the brainrot content. Nah I'd win.
no vision accessories? also the dynamic between Paimon and the mc is a bit sus, hmm it should be technically fine as Paimon probably is old as f, and if the body of a child is the problem then the mc can make her grow. It's "technically" fine i suppose.
perhaps so, so what i said in the previous chapter could be ignored if this was the case.
So he isn't otto from HI3? a bit disappointed, also your synopsis makes me believe he is from HI3 and not just someone with the same name, you might want to add some disclaimer there, it feels like a bait for HI3 enjoyers such as me, well, its up to you though.
DISCLAIMER, I type this review in chapter 7, so what i write might change in the future and everything i type here is my opinion, don't let my opinion cloud your judgement, read it for yourself to find out you like this or not. Well, the concept is good, i like it too in fact, but the execution is lacking, there's too many Chinese stereotypes here (i guess its given as this ff is originated from china), as of writing this review I haven't found the usual "china is great china is good" nationalism, but even without that it still unbearable for me. Especially chapter 5-7, you will understand almost nothing there. Also the translation is so so, depends if you are used to read mtl brainrot its above that level. if not? then it's bad for you, the constant sudden pov changes from first to third without warning like **character a pov** or anything like that, is annoying. I know my English isn't perfect either, but still. Also can you please give me a spoiler about all chat member that isn't come from Chinese fiction? i might recognise them and give this story another try. The score isnt final and might change in the future if i pick this up again and it got better or worse. tldr: great but bad because of the bs.