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Honestly the only thing I like is just that the MC stole the opportunity of the original protagonist, but if you ask is he selfish then No he isn’t the way the Author describes the MC doesn’t match with what he actually is, he isn’t emotionless guy I would say he is very emotional with how fast he fell in love with that Lia girl
Honestly, the biggest flaw in this fanfic is that it’s not consistent, we don’t understand anything it feel like between every chapter there’s a few chapter missing. I think if you rewrite it and give more information, so at least we know the Mc better, man until now I have no idea how old the Mc is.
Honestly I have only read the first 8 chapter and I already have a few things to point out: 1- the chapter are unnecessarily long, and are filled with useless words, the author are basically stretched the sentences and make it super long, with no useful information.( bro this isn’t an essay) 2- the time skips are unreasonable and are in the wrong timing. 3- shikamaru at the age of only a year and a half ( let’s say 2) already awakened his chakra and are training. 4- the Mc has medical information that impressed even tsunadi and she came back to take him as an apprentice. I will be dropping it thanks anyway
The story is good and I like it, I like how Danzo is especially sense all the other fanfic have described him as an asshole( which he is) but I think this is the first fanfic that doesn’t show him as a complete evil guy. The only thing I don’t like is when the author start using Japanese words for spells and other things I don’t memorize them and I think them being translated to English will be better. Oh almost forgot I think the author is giving the Mc the template so fast, I don’t mind the Mc becoming Op but not in the start of the story especially not at such a young age maybe wait until he go to war. Anyway thanks author
The novel has a lot of potential but it get ruined because of his sister, others may think differently but to me almost all the novel that the Mc have family member will end as trash i like when the Mc is ether an orphan or he doesn’t have a sister honestly most novel write the Mc with a sister who is ether super talented or super useless or like this story his sister has some special background.
Honestly I had a high expectation for this novel, but the author tried play smart and made the Mc a slave for a girl that he barely knew, he got injured in the most stupid way, I mean the the two Supreme dragons can talk to him, they could have warned him about it but no they decided to let him get injured seriously so they can make him a slave, it’s so forceful that I felt like vomiting when I read that part. Let’s not forget about his sister who at first seemed to be injured then became cursed, main character doesn’t even have the body memory except for his parents being tortured and him running away. And the main character was supposed to be smart and ruthless he couldn’t sleep because he was traumatized please, he couldn’t stand the stares he was receiving please, he almost couldn’t hold himself because of a girl please man that’s stupid. And the worst part is the main character refusing to get stronger in a world that he knew that strength is everything because of stupid fear that he will gather attention. I think the autho should remake it, and will not talk about the name of the novel. Good luck