VRW1
an arthor and also an artist and working on getting an amie.
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The story have potential and how the set goal of which each character is going to have to overcome in the story and how the author did that in the story, but there is grammar errors, but every story have grammar errors. It give the author more room to improve and involve the creation of your storytelling. Keep it up author
Some words need to be capitalize. The story is great, but that old man is up something. Nice touch putting in shaman. A MC that is inbetween her sister and mother. The grandmother is more mysterious. The story gave potentials but grammar need to be corrected.
That knife and pepper spray going to be useless.
Don’t follow.🤦🏽
I don’t know what culture shaman come from but it can be build a lot of storytelling.
This old man up something.
That guy going to come up later.
From a dream to a nightmare.
Telling the object is like the person is a good comparison when it comes to personalities and describing the behavior of people.