Anybody remember how in chapter 16 after Laura gets 'shocked' at touching C's hand and blanks out for a while, she mumbles about how it is a 'sin for her to love him' before desperately trying to assure that it is 'NOT a sin for him to love'? Perhaps after getting 'the touch' she also saw C's mental breakdown and eventual jumping off the roof. This might explain why Laura became drastically more obsessed to try and 'keep him safe' since now, on top of all the times he sacrificed himself to save her, she now feels partially responsible for C's misery. Thinking that her inevitable death (a key plot point) is what helped drove him to this point. If you think about it Laura has memories of all the horrible deaths she's experienced, the guilt of having C sacrificing himself repeatedly in attempts to save her and the knowledge that there is a high chance she'll die in few days, no wonder she went Yandere. Even without directly interfering, the system can still spit out Yandere's like a cowboy in a bucket factory. Anyway that's just a theory, a Yandere theory, thanks for reading! ( •̀ᄇ• ́)ﻭ✧

Brilliant has gone full mad scientist mode and I'm all for it!

Oh god! Anthony now has competitors!

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It seems the Immortals have made a grave mistake

Oh boi, It's crusade time _( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡° 」∠)_

Yeah, Anthony is struggling... Struggling to pick which seasoning is best for roasted worm

Oh boy! It's colonisation time!!! ~(˘▽˘~) (~˘▽˘)~

I guess you could say that they're "Fire Ants" ( ╭☞≖ิ‿≖ิ )╭☞

Even the Ancients want a peice of Anthony's shiny diamond booty now. There's always a price for being fabulous

Ren needs all the therapy

Love the chapter, I was at the edge of my seat waiting for what Kevin would do (* ˃ ᵕ ˂ ) I don't know why but I get a laugh just imagining Kevin desperately stuffing grass into his mouth, like just fistfulls of grass straight down his throat. Also Ren is Cockroach Boi confirmed, even when He's meant to die he just survives somehow ┐｜❛□❛✿｜┌

Hmm... Maybe the book was 'burned to ashes' but not necessarily 'destroyed'. If you think about it the book was just a convenient mean for Ren to use his authority as this world's author (not without cost though). Perhaps Ren still has this power but just doesn't know/realise it. When Ren first gets the book it's completely blank, it doesn't even have a title. It wasn't until Ren leaved the room that the book started to manifest it's power or maybe the power manifested within the book. Ren did ask his mom for something to read afterall, so why not his own book? Maybe this 'power of the story' will come back in some weird, obscure way when he needs it or when Kevin needs it (it did tell Ren Kevin's future afterall). But honestly who knows, it's all up to the whims of the Author. This has been my theory on Ren's. furture diary and thank you for listening to my Ted Talk. Sorry for the essay (,,•﹏•,,)

Whoops ┐｜❛□❛ ｜┌

COME BROTHERS! COME AND JOIN THE FELLOWSHIP OF THE ANT!

Nate just got straight up murdered

Rest in peace Blip o̴̶̷̥᷅﹏o̴̶̷̥᷅

*Bryce just planning on executing Alex and Quin "Huh? Why do I hear boss music?"

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I'm not a professional writer and most of the points in the review are just my opinions. However, I hope you at least enjoy reading this piece of criticism :) This book is not a masterpiece and is definitely not for everyone (high amounts of blood, gore, brutality and levels of horniness that can rival a smutty romance novel). However, if this book is for you, it will be one of the most entertaining things you'll ever read. Thank god I'm one of those people :) I love this book, I've spent hours just binging chapter after chapter seeing what kind of twisted screwed up things the Drip will throw out next. Nearly every character in this book has the moral compass of a Fridge magnet and I'm all for it! The torture scenes get so bizarre and unnecessarily brutal that It completely surprises you and you're just like 'JEEZE LUISE THIS IS DISGUSTING! ... I want more.' As you read further through the book you'll find yourself becoming attached to the main characters as they grow and move forward, creating a path of blood, guts and destruction in their wake. You'll also find the story getting better and more engaging as Drip grows and improves (More twists, more mysteries!). It really is a treat to see the book progress alongside the author's skill. Despite all the praise I'm singing, there are still some problems with the book, especially during the beginning. Though Drip does address this, so I'll just address the problems that stick out to me most. But please do not let these deter you from reading the book. My first nitpick is that the characters all speak like dictionaries, full formal sentences and often describing exactly what they're feeling at the time alongside a psychoanalysis of their current mental state. It gets a bit jarring when all of a sudden a character is describing their entire backstory to the main character who they've probably only known for a few days. It also feels strange for characters, especially those from lower-class backgrounds (like our main character), to speak like an essay document with a lack of abbreviation or accent (e.g using ya instead of you and etc). The best way (in my opinion) to make the characters feel more natural would be to try and use more lingo or try and shorten sentences. Another way would be, rather than the characters explaining how they feel, to use more body language and leave aspects of that character more ambiguous, revealing their backstory and true feelings slowly over time, rather than just in a single stream of dialogue. Another problem I have is that the villains are all nearly the same. At first, they'll be different in terms of personality but then, as if a switch is flipped, they all resort to this 'how dare you be better than I expected you to be, you die now!' personality. It's getting slightly better, especially later in the story and this is just a petty little nitpick anyway, so don't take this one too seriously. However, it wouldn't hurt to have a more calm and morally grey villain rather than big, loud and evil. The last nitpick I have with this book is that it is more tell than show. It has an unhealthy habit of halting the story momentarily to tell and explain to the reader about this new aspect of the story or how a character is feeling. There's nothing wrong with that, however when you sidetrack from the story to explain how the life of a character who will literally die in a few moments (dedicating a chapter to their torture and death), that is when it becomes a slight problem. Sometimes it's best to just leave some things out or try and show information through actions rather than words (I've already touched upon this when talking about making characters feel more natural). For example, if a character is a womanizer just show them trying to hit on a girl, only to be pushed away which leads them to chase after that girl relentlessly. Sometimes you can convey just as much information within a few actions as telling the reader directly. In conclusion, The Great Demon System has some problems in terms of writing and characters. But all these are simple problems that most writers have and only shows how much potential Drip has to grow. I honestly love this book due to how entertaining it is to read, mainly due to how dark and controversial it can get and in the most recent chapters, I have been hooked with the story. I hope this review wasn't too long and sorry if it seems like I'm trying to put down Drip or change the story. I was just trying to highlight areas the author can improve on. Honestly, I don't care even if the story doesn't change in any way. I'm just having a great time reading the story and am happy as long as Drip enjoys writing their story how they want to.