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Crazy_potatoes3mthCommentedseriously bruhh
Within the interrogation room. Erix was currently sitting with a handcuff in his hands having been brought by the justice league as precaution seeing he was a bigger threat than Darkseid himself!- Crazy_potatoes8mthReplied to Azoroth
You're welcome and your fanfic is interesting btw.
As I extended my hand, a familiar sensation enveloped us, the magic of teleportation whisking us away from the throne room to the enigmatic realm of the 11th. In that fleeting moment, I cast a last glance towards Momonga, a silent promise that together, we would confront the mysteries that awaited us. - Crazy_potatoes8mthReplied to Azoroth
and please if you want to enrich your vocabulary and literature then place this on the literature section of webnovel to note the reader, thank you.
As I extended my hand, a familiar sensation enveloped us, the magic of teleportation whisking us away from the throne room to the enigmatic realm of the 11th. In that fleeting moment, I cast a last glance towards Momonga, a silent promise that together, we would confront the mysteries that awaited us. - Crazy_potatoes8mthReplied to
I meant no offensive words btw, but on how things that you write on those very specific lines like, ex: " i grab him in the hand, the smooth yet rough skin of his hand that endure countless hours of work, left me with awe and admiration to him" see to me if i'm not aware of his gender the people will mistaken him to be a girl. that's what i'm saying to much dramatic words on too little action will be boring to read and it's becoming annoying really it's not a Shakespeare book to be a dramatic, But town it down a little bit it's more interesting to be specific in battle scenes. And you didn't write it in your synopsis that you intend to sharpen your vocabulary....
As I extended my hand, a familiar sensation enveloped us, the magic of teleportation whisking us away from the throne room to the enigmatic realm of the 11th. In that fleeting moment, I cast a last glance towards Momonga, a silent promise that together, we would confront the mysteries that awaited us. - Crazy_potatoes8mthReplied to The_Blind_Bandit
and by any means don't add the word "not" if you already use the word "don't" cause it will be like this "do not not"..
Kahn: (raising an eyebrow) "Pirates, huh? Might as well give 'em a little fireworks show. Shell 'em." - Crazy_potatoes8mthCommented
it seems like the mc is the wife of momonga the way of describing it... too many dramatic words for being lazy to describe the stats of the MC. just "NOD" is fine author.
As I extended my hand, a familiar sensation enveloped us, the magic of teleportation whisking us away from the throne room to the enigmatic realm of the 11th. In that fleeting moment, I cast a last glance towards Momonga, a silent promise that together, we would confront the mysteries that awaited us. - Crazy_potatoes8mthCommented
sounds gayy
"Exactly," I replied, offering a reassuring mental nod. "We'll face this head-on, step by step. Together." - Crazy_potatoes8mthCommented
where?
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?? where?
This paragraph has been deleted. - Crazy_potatoes8mthPosted
yoo author just came here to say that i dropped this fanfic a while ago then see that you updated so i checked it to see if there's improvement to the mc then checked the comments and guess what i see this reader AnRa dunno if its correct and it's very accurate!! you just make soooo weak and pathetic that knows SUN WUKONG strength to this little s***... then to add to the already horrible strength he's in YOU even make it that "you're worthy" thing to use staff, etc, to use his powers that he owns like wtf bruhh give me a break... this isn't thor he's sun wukong i bet stronger than thor! and IF you make it that he can wield it if the person is worthy of the staff "that he is worthy" already why can colossus lift it? even thor's hammer cannot be wielded by anybody? huh that some rule bending s*** i read for a while now. Soooo good luck on your fanfic cause people will find this absurd to the point that "NOT WORTH READING" and has brain aneurysm itself.
- Crazy_potatoes8mthReplied to King_of_Dogs
you go first
"get your ass up and plant that fence down before I whip your dirty ass nigg-" - Crazy_potatoes9mthPosted
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they don't bow they use guns....jwk
The female police officer immediately bowed slightly quite politely before heading towards the police car parked by the roadside and leaving to continue her patrol. - Crazy_potatoes10mthCommented
the pic that the author picks is not what you call ethereal charm and perfectly balanced masculinity...it's the pure face of a brute or a gang leader, seriously at least pick a more reasonable face of what you're describing...
After some exploration, Blake found himself in a chamber adorned with a shimmering mirror. Curiosity compelled him to approach, and as he gazed on it, he saw his own handsome face which possesses a perfect balance of masculine features and ethereal charm, captivating anyone who gaze upon it. - Crazy_potatoes10mthCommented"You drew our attention on you and let her take the box, you sure are Cunning." Doflamingo turned green, he can't let this mission failed, he doesn't want face the warth of kaido.
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we can see already that she is a goddess no need to describe it very often, and why not just skip it if she is so powerful already make it like a time skip where she's on the floor 30 etc.and meet the protagonist cause it's useless to describe the whole tutorial arc. it's like you just make it to have word count, seriously it's your (A/N) that has a lot in every chapter like bruhhh..
(N\A: guys the tests do not have a major difficulty is because they remember that it is a tutorial for the players and obviously since they are novices they will not put them from the beginning to kill a dragon. In addition, Shiro is a goddess and not a player, so those tests are only a child's game for her). - Crazy_potatoes10mthCommented
it's *murmur*..... please stop the murmura word
[Are, forget to keep your soul... but well there will be no problem with killing these useless] Murmura Shiro a little disappointed in the situation.