Missy_Castillo
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he was an avid fan of Taylor and accepted her sudden change of demeanor towards him after Taylor Swift almost proposing to him, just like that?
so, he has a girlfriend while the news broke about him and Taylor Swift? 🤔
**am I that handsome 🤗
aww which name? is it Anderewe or Ysmena? You can just read Anderewe as is ☺ while for the queen's name, I'll let the readers read it the way they wanted: Ismena or Imena 🤗
Thank you for the honest feedback 🤗 Spoilers and revelations are too early to be laid out as I wanted to focus on Aurnia and Aramis' blooming relationship for now, before the story would turn heavy 🤭 For the names, oh dear Lord, I don't what has gotten into me for naming the two fathers with Andruche and Anderewe, sorry readers, I couldn't change this. I am glad that your heart ached for our female lead because that was really my goal and I intend for her to be very vulnerable and miserable in the first two chapters 😝 Lastly, thank you for bringing up my other book and for appreciating my spoilers and cliff-hangers there, you sounded like you have a lot of theory going inside your head regarding Gala's story mwehehehe. I appreciate your review so much! 🤗❤
First, I think you really need to put a proper book cover to entice potential readers to your book. I am going to be blunt but the first 4 chapters were boring. The first chapter lacks a powerful cliff-hanger but the plot/world background had sold me to read Chapter 2, so I hope you can edit the first chapter and make it as interesting as to convince a reader to read further. The narrations were too long, although the grammar and spellings were decent except some instances wherein there were no space after '.' I strongly recommend to minimize describing everything and everyone in detail, especially filler characters like hair colors and the colors of their outfits. Try introducing new characters slowly but interestingly, create mystery around those characters to hook up your readers' attention. Honestly, the story were too fast-paced and all scenes were too simple, like for chapter 2 wherein the main character was introduced. I wish the author could have put more gravity to the scene wherein she discovered that she was a caster and that she was adopted. Also, I agree to one of your reader's review about the Japanese names. Since this is fantasy, you can use fictitious names for places because it was really weird for a character living in Syria having a Japanese name. Lastly, I do look forward to your growth as a writer. Continue writing and improve in your craft. 🤗
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I think you meant university... not varsity hehe