Undawn
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Undawn2mthReplied to Bogdan7and you need to pay attention to what you spell, now then let us enjoy this "bad writing"
Seeing these two talk about their deaths, and knowing I am the one responsible for bringing them back makes me feel so guilty. I said I wanted to protect Licia, and I am trying to give her the best of times, while also allowing her to choose for herself to the best of my ability. But is she truly happy with this? Is living once again a blessing or a torture in her eyes? I try not to question myself about this, so as to steel myself and have no doubts about the path I'm walking, but at the end of the day, is it truly fair for me to rob these people of their death, only for what? Becoming stronger? Exploring my power? I think with this girl I'll obtain the answer to my questions.- Undawn2mthCommentedCh 113 Chapter 112: Damn Vampires
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I'm SORRY but the guy you want us to fight just sent a man FLYING WITH A PUNCH how about you go fight them
This paragraph has been deleted. - Undawn3mthCommented"I have been sent here to destroy you. At first, I wasn't even aware of who you were or if you were the final boss. But after learning of this place's story and after talking with the victims, I've learned why I came here." I sighed, smiling at him. "I'm here to serve your just desserts, bitch. Karma, pretty much."
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L+Ratio+Skill Issue Bozo
"ACCURSED TRICKSTER!" - Undawn4mthCommentedKissing.
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Listen if we have to deal with Christopher Columbus I request he suffers a bit,or a lot, because his list of war crimes are very....
Bear in mind this is just a fictional rendition of Abraham Lincoln, so it won't be completely accurate, I will make him quirky and funny too. Anyways, what other Historical Figures would you like to see as Constellations? Give me some ideas! - Undawn5mthCommented
I KNEW IT
Just like in the novel, the dungeon of Abraham Lincoln is much different than others. He doesn't want to fight at all and wants to mostly observe and help somebody qualified. - Undawn5mthCommented
oh my God is fockin Abraham
[To step inside the [Breaker of the Chains of Slavery] Dungeon, you must have completed certain requirements.] - Undawn5mthCommented"Eradication of the Krath is our only viable path forward. We must exterminate them from the Dungeon completely."
- Undawn5mthCommented"Well…" Annabelle suddenly raised her dress upwards as countless small black spiders emerged.
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You know as a theory man myself I can't help but scream from this last line *Inhales Intensely*
"Well… It's okay, you're indeed very busy. I wish all of you good luck." She smiled, as she suddenly gave me a kiss in my forehead and hugged me. "Please, take care, my other half…" - Undawn5mthCommented"I.... d-daughter." She whispered so softly that it almost sounded as if it was the wind.
- Undawn6mthCommented"I chose something that allowed me to bring others to my level for my fourth Sigil. It strips them of their power while boosting my own." Allura smiled mysteriously, refusing to elaborate on the limits of her ability.
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So training ark for ryou Haki then
[Before you get too carried away,] Granin chips in, [remember that manipulating mana outside of your body is much harder than the mana inside it. Manipulating energy within someone else's body is another level of difficulty above that. You'll need to train hard before you can even dream of setting off those insane bombs you can make.] - Undawn6mthCommented
Gaia?
[The Cosmic Throne {Maiden that Watches Over Nature} was cheering for you all this time and feels relieved you're alright. She smiles at you softly and offers you her gifts.] - Undawn6mthCommented
Ok so going off of who the author is this is the last thing you are gonna do (I think this will be another Ainsley situation)
This Privilege seems to be ideal to become some sort of Tamer. Maybe like that, I can overcome my weakness at the beginning and level up more easily. Ah, now I am beginning to like these stupid Constellations! Perhaps I should set an altar to pray for them? - Undawn7mthCommented
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Ok so I'm writing this from chapter 5Writing Quality: It's sadly very poor and I can barely get through a single sentence without having to think hard on what you wanted to insinuate. There are many errors where there are words that were used in the wrong context or were meant to be something else entirely.Story Development: It's a great premise and I find that the story is fairly interesting but my one gripe was the lack of history of the MCs previous world before it was blown up. We are basically thrown in the middle( or end) of what should be an extremely tense battle that feels more like a simple cakewalk.Character Design: Your character design is pretty good and but you may need a few more detail.Overall I think that you may want to revisit these older chapters because they are by far an annnoyance to read through causally for most and can lose you some potential readers on the first or second chapters.