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Although the wound on his back is deep, fortunately the blood had dried up or else the journey here, which takes about four hours, would have already taken away his life. (Not criticizing, just saying this makes it flow a little better)
Why was I so unlucky today, first my girlfriend broke up with me, and now I’m being chased by (a grandfather ghost) or (the ghost of a grandfather) Not criticizing, just saying it’s a little easier to read this way, at least for me.
I would suggest rewriting this chapter with someone versed in English grammar, it’s a little hard to read at times, and I’m not sure which tense (past, present, future,) you meant to use, but I believe you used all three, however it’s a good story so far, and I think I will continue to read.