Little688
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Read books
do you!
I didn’t write this to bad mouth you.
Bro I’m reading this on my iPad so you good lol.
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I appreciate you reading my paragraph and thank you for your story, bro.
Bro, your story gots a lot potential bro, I mean it’s good I really mean it, but there hasn’t been one fighting scene whatsoever, (training doesn’t count), your story is about dxd and bleach they are both fighting anime, I mean, I like my romance but you gotta have a balance you know what I mean. I like op characters as much as the next person but your character is too strong, Think about it, the heavenly dragons were top 10 or whatever and your character is stronger than them and when you do get your fighting scene, it would not be entertaining whatsoever because i would already know the outcome. reason, Do you know the feeling of when you’re a playing/watching videogame/anime and you feel like you/they could lose any point, that’s the feeling I’m talking about. But it’s just fanfic at the end of the day and I hope you keep writing bro. P.s i’m sorry for the paragraph, and I know it’s not that serious, again, sorry for the paragraph.
Six?
Hey what about 5%? It would make the story more balanced. I mean, I don’t know anything about writing a story, so you do you in a positive way.
Idk how you did but you manage to make a good movie reference. there’s some people who are just cringe with movies references.
Perfect for that moment, bro
you might wanna fix this
Hey. This sound like fast and furious a little too much.
I mean the Mc not the kid.
2009
Hey this remind me of Sherlock Holmes movie